You relocated to a new country for work. Write to your previous co-worker. In your letter: - Tell him/her where you live in the new country - Describe how you feel - Explain what you are doing at work - Invite him/her for a visit.
Sample Response
Dear Raj,
Hope this letter finds you in radiant health and best of spirits. I am writing this letter to share some details of my work and a new place. You know that I moved from SBI to ICICI Bank a few months ago in New-Zealand. I am located in hill park avenue of the capital city where people are good and helping me with many things.
It’s been five weeks and the weather condition is very cold as I shifted from India so it may take some time to acclimatize myself. I joined as a junior clerk in the bank and work life is very hectic. People are amicably and joyful towards me they are very responsible and committed in their work so it creates a serious vibe around me.
I would like you to visit here once you get a vacation formwork as there are many ancient and diverse places that can mesmerize your attention. One of the major attractions is downtown which offers many things for tourists and hopes you come with your full family so I would have a chance to host you.
Looking forward to seeing you soon! Yours lovingly,
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add the article Original: radiant health and best of spirits Suggested revision: radiant health and the best of spirits Why it matters: The superlative phrase needs the definite article.
- 2. Use natural phrasing Original: details of my work and a new place Suggested revision: details about my work and my new home Why it matters: This wording states the two topics of the letter more naturally.
- 3. Remove the hyphen Original: New-Zealand Suggested revision: New Zealand Why it matters: The country name is written without a hyphen.
- 4. Capitalize the address Original: hill park avenue Suggested revision: Hill Park Avenue Why it matters: Each main word in this proper place name needs a capital letter.
- 5. Choose a precise adjective Original: good Suggested revision: kind Why it matters: Kind describes the residents' helpful behaviour more precisely.
- 6. Use the workplace preposition Original: in Suggested revision: at Why it matters: At is the more natural preposition for a place of work.
- 7. Use the standard collocation Original: work Suggested revision: working Why it matters: Working life is the standard expression in this context.
- 8. Use an adjective Original: amicably Suggested revision: amicable Why it matters: The linking verb are requires the adjective amicable rather than the adverb amicably.
- 9. Describe their manner Original: joyful Suggested revision: friendly Why it matters: Friendly fits the intended description of how colleagues treat the writer.
- 10. Separate the clauses Original: towards me they Suggested revision: towards me, but they Why it matters: A comma and conjunction are needed to connect these contrasting independent clauses.
- 11. Correct the collocation Original: in Suggested revision: to Why it matters: Committed takes the preposition to in this expression.
- 12. Use a professional phrase Original: serious vibe Suggested revision: professional atmosphere Why it matters: Professional atmosphere is clearer and more suitable for describing a workplace.
Suggested Rewrites
- radiant health and best of spirits radiant health and the best of spirits
- details of my work and a new place details about my work and my new home
- New-Zealand New Zealand
- hill park avenue Hill Park Avenue
- good kind
- in at
Why this response received Band 6.0
The letter clearly addresses the relocation, new surroundings, work, feelings, and invitation, and its friendly tone suits a former colleague. Its main limitation is recurrent awkward wording and sentence construction, which sometimes makes otherwise relevant details less natural and precise. The highest priority is to revise collocations and separate run-on ideas into accurately punctuated sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Achievement
The purpose is clear and all four bullet points are addressed with relevant detail in an appropriately friendly tone.
Develop the description of personal feelings more explicitly and finish with a complete informal closing and name.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is organised into purposeful paragraphs and follows a generally clear sequence from relocation to work and invitation.
Use clearer sentence boundaries within paragraphs so that distinct ideas do not run together.
Lexical Resource
The letter shows some range, including less common vocabulary, but several word choices and collocations are unnatural.
Prioritise natural combinations such as friendly towards me, committed to their work, and catch your interest.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the message, although recurring agreement, article, and punctuation errors reduce control.
Check each long sentence for a complete clause structure, correct word form, and appropriate punctuation.
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IELTS General Training Writing Task 1
You relocated to a new country for work. Write to your previous co-worker. In your letter:
- Tell him/her where you live in the new country
- Describe how you feel
- Explain what you are doing at work
- Invite him/her for a visit.
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