Things like puzzles, board games and pictures can contribute to a child’s development. What would you give a child to help him\her develop and why?
Sample Response
Items like puzzles, board games and pictures undoubtedly holds a significant contribution to the child’s growth. I strongly believe that these items are the inevitable factor for the kid’s development who ranges between anyone from the time of birth to until the age of teenager.
Firstly, Puzzles as it sounds like a riddle is a most easy to do task but only once you become used to it. Children should be encouraged to play puzzle games because, they will see a lot of different pieces of the puzzle scattered on table, they would send signals to brain to recognize and identify the objects they know and separate them from different objects. After this, kids brain and hands work in tandem, which actually helps them to find the right piece and fit it into the puzzle accurately. For example, it has been observed that children who were exposed to puzzles first time were filled with anxiety and fear and looks astonished as compared to the others who play it on a regular basis.
Second, important item is board-games which are very common and quite popular among kids but not all forms of it. The children should try to play most of the varieties of the board game because it helps especially the young kids to recollect the numbers of dice, they can easily locate the safe and unsafe spots on board games and on top of that they are aware of some dangers like a snake bite in board games.
Thirdly, pictures often help the children to store the images in the mind so that they can be recollected at the time when shown to them either to identify the name of the people or the place they went to.
To conclude, the items like puzzles, board games and pictures, all three of them are vital in the overall child development, and if ignored, it can bring detrimental effects to the children overall growth and development
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use lowercase after linker Original: Puzzles Suggested revision: puzzles Why it matters: A common noun should not be capitalised after the introductory linker.
- 2. Clarify the comparison Original: as it sounds like a riddle Suggested revision: which is similar to a riddle Why it matters: The original clause has an incorrect subject reference and an awkward comparison structure.
- 3. Correct the adjective phrase Original: a most easy to do task Suggested revision: a very easy task Why it matters: 'Easy' takes 'very' rather than 'most' in this non-superlative construction.
- 4. Add the possessive form Original: kids brain and hands Suggested revision: children's brains and hands Why it matters: The possessive and plural forms are required when referring to children's brains and hands generally.
- 5. Add the missing preposition Original: exposed to puzzles first time Suggested revision: exposed to puzzles for the first time Why it matters: The fixed time expression is 'for the first time'.
- 6. Match tense and subject Original: looks Suggested revision: looked Why it matters: The plural subject 'children' and the past-time context require 'looked'.
- 7. Clarify the comparison group Original: as compared to the others Suggested revision: compared with those Why it matters: 'Those' clearly refers to the children in the following relative clause.
- 8. Match tense and number Original: who play it on a regular basis Suggested revision: who played with them regularly Why it matters: The past tense and plural pronoun should match the comparison and the plural noun 'puzzles'.
- 9. Add the required article Original: Second, important item Suggested revision: The second important item Why it matters: The ordinal phrase needs the definite article 'the'.
- 10. Complete the contrast Original: but not all forms of it Suggested revision: although not all forms are equally popular Why it matters: The revision states clearly what distinguishes some forms from others.
- 11. Use concise wording Original: most of the varieties of the board game Suggested revision: many varieties of board games Why it matters: The revised phrase is grammatically natural and avoids unnecessary words.
- 12. Fix reference and phrasing Original: it helps especially the young kids to recollect the numbers of dice Suggested revision: this especially helps young children recognise the numbers on dice Why it matters: The revision provides a clear subject and uses the correct preposition with 'numbers'.
Suggested Rewrites
- Puzzles puzzles
- as it sounds like a riddle which is similar to a riddle
- a most easy to do task a very easy task
- kids brain and hands children's brains and hands
- exposed to puzzles first time exposed to puzzles for the first time
- looks looked
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response gives a clear selection of three resources and organises the discussion so that the intended developmental benefit of each can be followed. However, the support is uneven: the puzzle section is detailed, while the board-game and picture sections offer limited or sometimes unclear reasoning, and frequent grammatical and collocational errors weaken precision. The highest priority is to develop one or two choices more convincingly with clear cause-and-effect explanations expressed in shorter, accurately controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response answers what should be given and why, but development is uneven and some supporting claims are unclear or only loosely convincing.
Select fewer items if necessary and explain each developmental benefit through a precise causal chain and a clearly relevant example.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and sequencing markers create a recognisable progression, though long run-on sentences and mechanical transitions sometimes weaken cohesion.
Give each paragraph one focused claim and separate supporting stages into shorter sentences with clear referencing.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate and includes some useful topic language, but frequent inaccurate formations and collocations reduce naturalness and precision.
Build reliable combinations such as 'contribute significantly', 'solve puzzles', and 'children's development' before attempting more elaborate wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex forms are attempted, but frequent errors in agreement, articles, possessives, plurals, and sentence boundaries limit control.
Prioritise complete sentence boundaries and systematically check subject-verb agreement, articles, and possessive forms.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Things like puzzles, board games and pictures can contribute to a child’s development. What would you give a child to help him\her develop and why?
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