Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and will use up the world’s resources. Do you agree or disagree?

Sample Response

1

The impact of air travel on the environment has been a topic of continuous debate in recent years, following the concern that more and more people refer to it as a convenient means of travel. I believefeel that restrictions should be imposed on air travel.

2

The first major reasonfirst undeniable factor is that aircraft accountaccounts for a large proportion of air pollution. Planes, either idling or taxiing, contribute a large proportionpart of local emissions annually. Some people suggest thatThere are some suggestions that air travel is one of the most suitable modes of transport for long-distance trips. This claim is, however, unconvincingThis idea is, however, fallacious. Trains, for instance, can also serve as an viableoptimal alternative, consuming less energy and causing less pollutioncontamination. Therefore, it is stronglySo it is highly recommended thatrecommended, that governments imposethe government imposes restrictions on domestic air travelintra-country travel.

3

In addition to air pollutionAlong with air pollution, aircraft can cause noise pollution. Although it is impossible to measure the precise impactprecisely measure the actual impact of noise on people’s everyday lives, its ability to increase anxiety and disturbance levels has been confirmed. Especially for those living in the neighbourhood of an airport and around the flight paths, noise problems created by aircraft are a headache. However, the air is indeed the only fastest means of transport to fly across countries. Therefore, air travel should be managedSo it should be operated in such a way that its advantages can be maximizedstrengths can be taken maximum advantage of. For instance, by replacing old engines with cleaner ones, people can mitigate the negative effects of flyingthe negative effect caused by flying.

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In light of the facts discussed above, substantial consideration should be given to pollution caused by aircraft. Air travel should be preferred only when there are no other means of transport available.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response presents a consistent position and develops a coherent case through pollution, transport alternatives, and cleaner aircraft technology. Its main limitation is that it does not directly examine the claim about depletion of world resources, while a few awkward or incomplete constructions reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to address that missing dimension explicitly and connect it to the proposed degree of restriction.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

6.5
Scoring rule

A clear opinion is maintained and the pollution argument is developed, but resource depletion receives no direct treatment.

Next step

Add a developed explanation of aviation's fuel consumption and show how it strengthens the case for selective restrictions.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

Ideas are organised into a logical argument with clear paragraph purposes and generally effective linking.

Next step

Strengthen the transition from pollution problems to the qualified policy position so the reasoning feels fully continuous.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

The response uses a varied topic-specific vocabulary, though several expressions are awkward or insufficiently precise.

Next step

Replace strained phrases such as only fastest means and taken maximum advantage of with concise, natural formulations.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.5
Scoring rule

Complex structures are used with generally clear meaning, but agreement errors, a sentence fragment, and awkward comparative forms recur.

Next step

Proofread for subject-verb agreement and ensure dependent phrases are attached to complete main clauses.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and will use up the world’s resources. Do you agree or disagree?

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