Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
It is true that animals are used for research in a variety of sitting, including tests to determine the safety of drugs, cosmetics and other substances. Although reasons can be given to justify this view, I personally believe that these experiments should be banned because it is ethically unacceptable.
There are several reasons why some people support using the animal in the medical research and other products testing. Firstly, the human is the important being on the planet so everything should be done to ensure human safety and survival. Animal testing enables scientific and researchers to test the safety of medication and other substance with which humans have regular contacts. Drugs, for instance, may pose significant harm to humans, so testing them on animals first give researchers good chance to determine drug safety before human trials are performed.
Secondly, researchers aim to minimise the suffering that animals experience in experiments by giving painkiller and anesthetic drugs. However, I would strongly agree with those who believe that animal experiments should be banned. Animal right activists (who defend animal right) argue that the lives of animals should be respected. The benefits of research using animals do not justify the suffering caused and the ethical debate against animals testing. Also, there are alternative non-animals methods of testing. For instance, computerised human - patient simulators and In vitro testing which is defined as a research using human cells and tissue can be used instead of using animals. In conclusion, there are some convincing arguments for and against animal testing, but I strongly believe that we as humans have no moral right to do experiments on animals and we should do everything we can to protect them.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Wrong noun Original: variety of sitting Suggested revision: variety of settings Why it matters: “Sitting” does not mean a context or environment here.
- 2. Use plural noun Original: using the animal Suggested revision: using animals Why it matters: Animals are discussed as a general class, so the plural is required.
- 3. Remove article Original: in the medical research Suggested revision: in medical research Why it matters: “Research” is uncountable and does not take “the” in this general reference.
- 4. Fix noun phrase Original: other products testing Suggested revision: testing other products Why it matters: The original noun sequence is not grammatically formed.
- 5. Fix general comparison Original: the human is the important being Suggested revision: humans are the most important beings Why it matters: A general plural subject and the superlative form make the comparison grammatical.
- 6. Add clause comma Original: planet so Suggested revision: planet, so Why it matters: A comma is needed before “so” when it joins two independent clauses.
- 7. Use person noun Original: scientific and researchers Suggested revision: scientists and researchers Why it matters: “Scientific” is an adjective, but the coordination requires a noun for people.
- 8. Use plural nouns Original: medication and other substance Suggested revision: medications and other substances Why it matters: The general reference requires plural count nouns.
- 9. Uncountable contact Original: regular contacts Suggested revision: regular contact Why it matters: “Contact” is uncountable when it means routine exposure to substances.
- 10. Subject verb agreement Original: first give Suggested revision: first gives Why it matters: The gerund phrase “testing them on animals first” is singular.
- 11. Add article Original: good chance Suggested revision: a good chance Why it matters: The singular count noun “chance” requires an article.
- 12. Use plural noun Original: painkiller Suggested revision: painkillers Why it matters: The general reference to drugs requires a plural form.
Suggested Rewrites
- variety of sitting variety of settings
- using the animal using animals
- in the medical research in medical research
- other products testing testing other products
- the human is the important being humans are the most important beings
- planet so planet, so
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response's strongest feature is its clear, consistent opposition to animal experimentation while still presenting relevant reasons for the supporting view. Its main limitation is imprecise language and frequent grammatical slips, alongside a final body paragraph that combines several argumentative moves and the conclusion. Prioritise accurate noun forms, articles, agreement, and clearer separation of the case against testing from the concluding judgement.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Response
Both views are addressed, the position is clear throughout, and relevant reasons and alternatives provide generally sound development.
Deepen the ethical case by explaining more precisely why the proposed alternatives make a ban practicable.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through the supporting and opposing cases, although the long final paragraph combines rebuttal, alternatives, and the conclusion.
Separate the case against testing and the conclusion into distinct paragraphs with clearer internal sequencing.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient range of topic vocabulary, but recurrent word-choice and word-form problems reduce precision.
Replace awkward forms such as plural modifiers and incorrect person nouns with accurate academic collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the argument clearly, but article, agreement, and noun-number errors recur.
Edit systematically for articles, singular-plural consistency, and subject-verb agreement in every sentence.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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