Some activities and sports are harmless and do not involve risks but some others involve risks and dangers and yet people are attracted to these activities. Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? You should
Sample Response
Nowadays many people are attractedmany people attracted to dangerous sports and other dangerous activities. From my everyday experience and observation, I think it is a result of dramatic changes in people's life. Just imagine in earlier timesat old times men had to hunt for food, fight, face many challenges and obstacles. Now our days are quite ordinary with a cup of coffee, doughnuts, computers, the desk table and TV. Basically, we do not have to struggle every day for our liveslife and we have nutritious meals without any effortefforts. So, all we have to do ishave to do is to contemplate our liveslife. However, I must confess it can be boring. All improvements created for the past centuries made our life easier. Nowadays people look for adventure. They want to face a challenge, prove something to themselvesprove themselves something, conquer the world, etc. Personally, I think that every person sees different goals in doing dangerous activities. Some people want to add some stress and tension to their lives. On the other handFrom the other side, other people want to eliminate stress and tension caused by their everyday livestension gained from their everyday lives. They can forget about all their troublesforget about all troubles and leave them behind. I believe that dangerous activities give one freedom, happiness, feeling of independence and tone. People who take part in sports such as Formula Onethe games like formula one or try to reach the summitvisit the peak of Mount Everestthe Mount Everest don’t do it only for fame or moneyfor only fame or money but for passionthe passion. For exampleAs an example, Mother Merry Courie even after knowing the dangerous effects of radiation worked with it. To sum up, I think that dangerous sports and activities are irreplaceable in our life. Without them ourout life would be miserable and boring.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response offers a clear central explanation and several relevant motives, especially the search for challenge and relief from routine. Its main limitation is uneven development: some claims are generalized or awkwardly supported, and the Curie example is only loosely connected to dangerous recreation. Prioritize explaining two or three distinct motives in fuller, well-paragraphed detail with directly relevant examples and more controlled sentence construction.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the question with several relevant reasons, but support is uneven and one example is only tangentially relevant.
Develop fewer motives more fully and support each one with a clearly connected example of dangerous sport or recreation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a broadly understandable sequence, but the lack of paragraphing and some mechanical transitions weaken progression.
Organize the response into distinct introduction, reason-focused body paragraphs, and conclusion, using transitions that clarify relationships between ideas.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied to discuss risk, challenge, stress, and motivation, although several collocations and word choices are inaccurate.
Improve precision in combinations such as proving oneself, making an effort, and doing something for passion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the main meaning, but recurring errors in articles, verb forms, and prepositions reduce control.
Proofread each sentence for a complete verb phrase and accurate use of articles, plurals, and prepositions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some activities and sports are harmless and do not involve risks but some others involve risks and dangers and yet people are attracted to these activities. Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? You should
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