Some people think that cars should be banned from large cities. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Sample Response

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Two common problems usually faced by a big city - traffic jam and air pollution, which are caused by many factors. However, most people tend to blame a large number of private cars as the greatest contributing factor which leads to the some people’s opinion claiming that the cars must be prohibited in the town. Although this statement seems plausible, I totally disagree that this kind of vehicle should be banned from the metropolis.

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The cars are not only beneficial to individual citizensbeneficial for the citizen as a user but also to the state by increasing its revenuefor the state, in increasing its income. If the use of cars in a large cityexistence of the cars in the large city is forbidden by the government, there will be no car tradethere will not be car trade in that town which consequently will reduce total sales of cars nationwide. This finally will decrease the nation's earningsdecrease nation's earning because car companies will reducedrop their production for that country and the tax revenue from car salesfrom the car sales will diminish automatically. Furthermore, this will also reduce annual car-tax revenue which is a main source of income for some countriesin which for some countries, this kind of tax is their main earning source.

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Moreover, this will cause another problemOn the other hand, this will cause another problem, for the car owners in particular, that the government would need to addressin which the government should be involved to overcome this problem. By banning the use of cars in the big city, cars owned by the city inhabitants will become unusablewill be useless and eventually they must sell their cars to avoid financial lossbecause this can harm them financially. If we look at the large numberlarge total number of cars that must be soldcars must be sold and the fact that the owners do not want to sell their cars at a lower price, this might be a difficult problem to solvea difficult problem to be solved.

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Finally, a huge budget must be allocated to improve alternative transportimprove the alternative vehicles in the city and many countries will not be able to eventually do it successfully. The car is considered as one of the most useful inventions ever and banning them is not a pragmatic solution. We should rather take alternative initiatives to reduce the traffic jam and air pollution in big cities.

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Personally, I strongly believe that prohibiting people from drivingprohibiting people to drive cars in big cities will generate some problems both for the state and the owners. Even though the cars contribute to the occurrence of traffic jam and air pollution in some cities, there must be other waysit must be the other ways to combat those problems without banning the existence of cars, such as creating underground transportation and green energies as a car fuel.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.5

The essay maintains a clear disagreement and develops several relevant consequences of a ban, particularly lost tax revenue, costs to owners, and investment in public transport. Its main limitation is that some reasoning is repetitive or only partly convincing, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to select fewer, stronger arguments and support each with a specific explanation or example in more accurately controlled sentences.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.0
Scoring rule

A clear position is maintained throughout and supported by several relevant arguments, although some claims are overgeneralised or not fully substantiated.

Next step

Strengthen the case by developing two or three central reasons with specific evidence rather than relying on broad assumptions about national car sales.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

The essay is logically paragraphised and progresses from the position through distinct supporting reasons, but some transitions and references are imprecise.

Next step

Use transitions that accurately show addition or progression and replace vague references such as repeated 'this' with explicit nouns.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.5
Scoring rule

There is sufficient range to discuss taxation, transport policy, and environmental problems, but awkward collocations and word-form choices occur regularly.

Next step

Improve precision with natural forms such as 'traffic congestion', 'national revenue', 'public transport', and 'renewable fuel'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

The response attempts varied complex structures, but frequent errors with articles, agreement, clause construction, and verb patterns limit control.

Next step

Edit sentences for complete clause structure and accurate patterns, especially 'prohibit people from driving' and 'there must be other ways'.

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