Some believe that people are naturally born as leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Many people believe that people are born god gifted were, have lots of talents, and are capable of leading from the front. Whereas others believe that leadership sill can develop. In my opinion, I agree with the latter form of rational. This essay will elaborate on both views, and thus it will lead to a logical conclusion.
There is no doubt that people are talented and have achieved a lot if their dream come true. There are some people that are naturally born as leaders and talented and very unique from others having different kind skills which others do not have. Many of the artists also perform in realities show and shows their skills to the world. In India, many of them believe that there are many who are born god gifted if we talk about sports person most famously know as god of cricket to Sachin Tendulkar and MS Dhoni if we come to superstar that Amitabh Bacchan and many others as people believe that people are not born to compete at their level.
On the other hand, people say that every person is born the same as others and they believe that hard works pay off. If we see in today’s generation, a person having successful life also holds a lot of struggle and hard work and skills which they have developed to reach that point. For instance, Sachin Tendulkar was used to practicing cricket 10 to 12 hours a day; whether it was a sunny day or rainy day, he kept his practice on. That’s the reason he is leading from the front now.
In my opinion, the journey of a successful person comes with lots of hard work as they are born the same as others.
To conclude according to the argument aforementioned one can reach to the conclusion is that every people are born equally, but it depends on some people are able to catch very soon where others take a very long time to catch which makes a difference of born leader naturally or need a lot of hard work and skills to develop.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use correct phrase Original: latter form of rational Suggested revision: latter view Why it matters: The original phrase does not express the intended reference to the second opinion.
- 2. Simplify the subject Original: There are some people that Suggested revision: Some people Why it matters: The existential construction is unnecessary and that is awkward for people.
- 3. Avoid redundancy Original: naturally born as leaders Suggested revision: born with natural leadership ability Why it matters: Naturally born is redundant and the revision expresses the intended ability precisely.
- 4. Correct comparison Original: very unique from others Suggested revision: distinct from others Why it matters: Unique is not normally graded by very and does not take from in this construction.
- 5. Fix noun phrase Original: different kind skills Suggested revision: different kinds of skills Why it matters: The plural count noun requires kinds of.
- 6. Match plural subject Original: shows Suggested revision: show Why it matters: The plural subject artists requires the base-form verb show.
- 7. Use inclusive plural Original: sports person Suggested revision: sportspeople Why it matters: The plural noun fits the general reference to athletes.
- 8. Use past participle Original: know Suggested revision: known Why it matters: The passive expression requires the past participle known.
- 9. Fix example structure Original: as god of cricket to Sachin Tendulkar and MS Dhoni Suggested revision: as cricket icons, such as Sachin Tendulkar and MS Dhoni Why it matters: Such as correctly introduces the named examples.
- 10. Fix agreement Original: hard works pay off Suggested revision: hard work pays off Why it matters: Hard work is an uncountable singular noun and takes pays.
- 11. Use direct opener Original: If we see in today’s generation Suggested revision: In today’s generation Why it matters: The conditional reporting phrase is unnecessary and unnatural here.
- 12. Fix noun phrase Original: a person having successful life Suggested revision: a successful person Why it matters: The adjective successful should directly modify person.
Suggested Rewrites
- latter form of rational latter view
- There are some people that Some people
- naturally born as leaders born with natural leadership ability
- very unique from others distinct from others
- different kind skills different kinds of skills
- shows show
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response has a clear opinion and a recognisable structure that attempts to discuss both views. However, the examples focus more on talent and personal success than on leadership, while frequent grammatical and lexical errors make several long sentences difficult to understand. The highest-priority improvement is to build each body paragraph around one directly relevant leadership claim, then express and support it through shorter, accurately controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views and an opinion are present, but the discussion often shifts from leadership to general talent or success.
Explain precisely how each example demonstrates innate leadership or learned leadership skills rather than celebrity or achievement alone.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has clear overall paragraphing, but progression within paragraphs is weakened by repetition and loosely connected claims.
Give each paragraph one controlling idea and link every supporting sentence explicitly back to that idea.
Lexical Resource
There is some topic-related vocabulary, but frequent spelling, word-form, and collocation errors limit precision.
Use familiar accurate expressions for leadership and skill development instead of forcing uncertain phrases such as latter form of rational.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Frequent errors in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles, and verb forms regularly strain comprehension.
Write shorter complete sentences and systematically check subject-verb agreement and verb tense before adding complex clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some believe that people are naturally born as leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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