Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of children playing computer games? What can be done to minimize the bad effects of children playing computer games?

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People use computers more extensively these days than ever before, and it is so widespread in our modern world that even children have access to these devices for playing games. This essay discusses the adverse impacts of children playing computer gamesplaying digital games on computer devices by youngsters and suggests some measures to reduce its negative effects. Concerning the negative effects on young children who play video gamesthe adverse impacts of young children playing video games, the most serious effectthe most devastating one is the addiction these games can causethe addiction these games create. Millions of dollars are spent to make computer games so that they attract a large audiencea large number of audiences and keep them glued to the computer screens. These games are therefore addictiveSo they are addictive by design. This obsession also hampersAnd this obsession hampers children's outdoor activities, studies, and even their time to socialiseactivities, studies and even time to socialise and learn important life skills. To illustrate, many studiesmany research works suggest that children who spend many hours playing computer games each day end up performing poorly at schoolperforming poorly in schools and avoid social events and outdoor activities. This excessive gaming can result in physicalIt results in physical and psychological issues including poor eyesight and despair. Moreover, violent games impair youngsters' judgementcloud the youngsters' judgement and disrupt their rational thinkingmake their rational thinking unstable. OftenOftentimes, youngsters who play violent games develop violent behaviourbehaviours. To cite an example, an unfortunate shooting event that claimed many innocent lives, that took place in an American school a few years ago, was carried out by a teenager who was addicted to shooting games. To minimise these negative effectsminimise the severity of these negative impacts, parents must monitor what their children are doing, especially on computers. They should not be allowed to play computer games for more than a couple of hours each week, and parents can actively participate in those games with their children so that it becomes family time. A good exampleAn ideal example of it could be my aunt and uncle who play video games with their children, and as a result, children are also interested in doing outdoor activities with them. Finally, parents can use parental controls foruse parental control over the digital content and games their children watch or play. These measures would deter children from downloading and playing games that are not suitable for their age. To conclude, computer games, when played excessively by children, have many detrimental effects. Proper parenting and monitoring seem like the best solution to solve these problems.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response addresses both parts thoroughly, with a clear explanation of addiction and several practical parental controls supported by relevant examples. Its strongest feature is the breadth and development of content, while the absence of paragraph breaks and occasional overgeneralised claims weaken precision and readability. Prioritise organising impacts and solutions into distinct paragraphs and qualifying claims about violence and health with more measured reasoning.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

8.0
Scoring rule

Both questions are directly and extensively addressed through several developed impacts and practical solutions.

Next step

Qualify broad claims about violent games and health effects so the supporting reasoning remains credible and precise.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

Ideas progress clearly from negative effects to parental solutions, but the single-block presentation weakens organisation.

Next step

Create separate introduction, impacts, solutions, and conclusion paragraphs, each centred on a clear controlling idea.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

A broad range of topic-specific vocabulary conveys meaning effectively despite some awkward or imprecise combinations.

Next step

Refine collocations such as 'a large number of audiences', 'many research works', and 'use parental control over'.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

Varied complex structures are generally controlled, with occasional fragments and cumbersome sentence construction.

Next step

Avoid beginning formal points with fragmentary 'So' or 'And' clauses and simplify overextended relative clauses.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Nowadays many people have access to computers on a wide basis and a large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of children playing computer games? What can be done to minimize the bad effects of children playing computer games?

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