Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so.
Sample Response
The issue about whether children should help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so is open for debate. Some people say that children should devote more time for playing with their friends, watching TV and studying. However, other people believe that children should help their parents with household tasks. Personally, for several reasons, which I will explain bellow, I adhere to the latter point of view. First of all, I think that every child should have his or her own responsibilities. When I was a child my parents taught me how to make breakfast in the morning. So, I woke up, went to the kitchen and prepared a couple of toasts for breakfast. It was easy and I enjoyed doing it because I liked the way my parents thanked me and I felt that they were proud of me. Also, my mom always wanted me to know how to cook, clean and iron my cloth. Thanks to the learning, nowadays, when my maid can not come to my house I handle all household tasks myself. Second of all, performing household tasks teaches children to value the job of people who did it. When I was a child I did not imagine that cleaning house could be so time and energy consuming. So, when I began to do some of the household tasks by myself I began to respect the job of others and tried to collect all my toys after my playing with them. Finally, doing household tasks teaches children to arrange their time. In addition to those practical benefits, help from children allows parents to have more spare time for their personal lives and for the children. A family can have more time to spend with each other talking, watching movies or just enjoying the beautiful moments. To sum up, I think that children should help their parents with household tasks. Doing household tasks helps them to grow into independent, self-confident, and attentive persons who respect their parents.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix issue collocation Original: about Suggested revision: of Why it matters: The natural expression is “the issue of whether,” not “the issue about whether.”
- 2. Fix preposition Original: for Suggested revision: to Why it matters: The verb “devote” takes “to” before a gerund.
- 3. Correct spelling Original: bellow Suggested revision: below Why it matters: “Bellow” is a different word; the intended adverb is “below.”
- 4. State support directly Original: I adhere to the latter point of view Suggested revision: I support the latter point of view Why it matters: “Support” expresses the position more directly and naturally than “adhere to” here.
- 5. Add introductory comma Original: When I was a child my parents Suggested revision: When I was a child, my parents Why it matters: A comma should follow the introductory dependent clause.
- 6. Use uncountable toast Original: a couple of toasts for breakfast Suggested revision: a couple of pieces of toast Why it matters: “Toast” is uncountable when it refers to toasted bread, so it needs “pieces of.”
- 7. Use formal wording Original: mom Suggested revision: mother Why it matters: “My mother” is more appropriate than conversational “my mom” in formal writing.
- 8. Use plural clothes Original: cloth Suggested revision: clothes Why it matters: “Cloth” is material, whereas “clothes” refers to garments.
- 9. Use concise sequence Original: First of all, Suggested revision: Firstly, Why it matters: “Firstly” creates a cleaner sequence with the later points.
- 10. Fix sequencing phrase Original: Second of all, Suggested revision: Secondly, Why it matters: “Secondly” is the standard formal transition in this sequence.
- 11. Clarify recurring work Original: the job of people who did it Suggested revision: the work of people who do them Why it matters: “Work” fits household tasks better than “job,” and the present tense describes recurring activity.
- 12. Add article Original: cleaning house Suggested revision: cleaning a house Why it matters: The singular countable noun “house” requires an article.
Suggested Rewrites
- about of
- for to
- bellow below
- I adhere to the latter point of view I support the latter point of view
- When I was a child my parents When I was a child, my parents
- a couple of toasts for breakfast a couple of pieces of toast
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear position and supports it with relevant personal examples and several practical benefits of household responsibilities. Its main limitation is that some later ideas are asserted briefly while awkward wording and the absence of clear paragraph breaks weaken polish and readability. The highest priority is to organise each main reason into a distinct, fully developed paragraph while refining collocations and sentence control.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is sustained and supported with relevant reasons and personal examples, although the time-management point is only briefly asserted.
Develop every main benefit with a specific explanation or example instead of introducing a final point without support.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas progress in a recognisable sequence, but mechanical signposting and the lack of clear paragraph divisions reduce cohesion.
Separate the introduction, each main reason, and the conclusion into purposeful paragraphs with more natural transitions.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient range for the topic, but recurring spelling and collocation problems sometimes make expression awkward.
Replace inaccurate phrases such as "iron my cloth" and "thanks to the learning" with precise, natural collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates the argument clearly, though errors in articles, prepositions, tense, and phrasing recur.
Proofread complex sentences for article, preposition, and verb-form accuracy, especially around time expressions and relative clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Children should be required to help with household tasks as soon as they are able to do so.
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