As reading is important for a good education, we should encourage our children to read whatever appeals to them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
The famous English philosopher Francis Bacon said, "Reading makes a full man". Reading books can strongly shape your interestsinclination, develop your thinkingmature your thoughts, broaden your horizonswiden your horizon and enrich your personality. Life is limited, but knowledge is boundless. The more books we read, the more knowledge we get. Hence, weWe should encourage our children to read more books. However, some books can also be harmfulbooks can also be harmful, particularly pornographic booksparticularly the pornographic books. Harmful books can contain damaging ideasBad books contain evil thoughts. In them, there might be many descriptions of violencemuch description about violence, superstition, and sex. Let's suppose that you are in the position of a parent. Would you allow your children to read whatever appeals to them? If your answer to the question is "yes", you are either extremely permissive or just plain irresponsible. If children read bad books, such harmful ideas may gradually influence their mindsthe evil thoughts would poison their mind gradually. They may become dispiritedThey will be dispirited and perhaps commit a crime. Good books, on the other hand, teach children and encourage them to do good thingsteach and help children to do good things. Good books are valuable companions for childrenchildren's real companions, and they are both instructive and inspiring. Children know past events from history books, study communication by language book, learn space and numbers through mathematics books. In a word, different kinds of good books can give them numerous ideas and a wealth of knowledgenumerous idea and knowledge. Consequently, those who read good books can be inspired to develop in a healthy waygrow healthily, while those who read bad ones will lead harmful liveslead a wicked life and experience serious difficultiesmeet with miserable failure. Therefore, before we encourageSo before we encourage our children to read books, we should teach them how to identifyteach and help them to identify good and bad books.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response offers a clear rejection of unrestricted reading and explains that parents should guide children toward beneficial material, while also recognising the educational value of books. Its main weaknesses are the absence of paragraphing and highly exaggerated claims that unsuitable books inevitably produce crime or failure; prioritise a balanced, evidence-based argument with clear paragraphs and practical criteria for age-appropriate reading.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay addresses the proposition and reaches a relevant position, but its support depends heavily on extreme, insufficiently justified consequences.
Explain realistic risks such as age-inappropriate content or misinformation and propose guided choice rather than dividing all books into simply good or evil.
Coherence and Cohesion
The ideas follow a recognisable contrast between beneficial and harmful reading, but the entire essay is one block and rhetorical questions interrupt progression.
Use an introduction, one paragraph on reading freedom and benefits, one on limits and guidance, and a concise conclusion.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough range to discuss education and influence, though frequent collocational and word-form errors reduce precision.
Use broaden horizons, develop thinking, descriptions of violence, language books, numerous ideas, and develop healthily in accurate contexts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Sentence forms show some variety and meaning is generally clear, but agreement, capitalization, article, number, and parallel-structure errors recur.
Check plurals and parallel verbs, writing children’s minds, language books, numerous ideas, and learn about space and numbers.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
As reading is important for a good education, we should encourage our children to read whatever appeals to them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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