Some people think that competitive sports have a positive effect on children's education while others argue that the effect is negative.
Sample Response
Sports nowadays haveSports, nowadays have become an integral part of young people's livesthe young generation. In this regard, some people believe that sports should be combined with educationit is wiser to take it hand in hand with education whereas others argue that schoolswhile some argue schools are meant only for academic studystudies. In this essay, both these views will be discussed and a conclusion will be drawn.
Why this response received Band 5.0
The response paraphrases the disagreement clearly and uses some appropriate academic language, but it is only an introduction: neither view is analysed, no supporting idea or example is provided, and no position or conclusion appears. At 54 words, it falls drastically short of the required length, so the priority is to write two developed body paragraphs and a direct judgement supported by specific educational effects.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response merely restates the two views and announces a discussion, without answering the issue, developing any idea or presenting a position.
Explain one educational benefit and one drawback of competitive sport with examples, then state and justify a clear overall view.
Coherence and Cohesion
The three introductory sentences have a locally understandable sequence, but there is no body development or overall essay progression.
Build a complete structure with an introduction, one developed paragraph for each side, and a conclusion that resolves the discussion.
Lexical Resource
The short response shows some appropriate academic vocabulary, including integral part and academic studies, though the limited sample and awkward hand in hand phrasing restrict demonstrated flexibility.
Develop topic-specific vocabulary around teamwork, motivation, pressure, academic focus and educational outcomes across a full response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response includes simple and complex forms with generally clear meaning, but the very short sample and errors in punctuation and clause linkage limit evidence of control.
Remove the unnecessary commas around nowadays and write a precise contrast such as others argue that schools should focus solely on academic study.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that competitive sports have a positive effect on children's education while others argue that the effect is negative.
Your response
Write the task yourself, then compare your choices with the annotated response.