Are computers essential features of modern education? What subjects can be better taught using computers? Are there aspects of a good education that cannot be taught using computers?
Sample Response
The world has witnessed many rapid changes in almost all areas including education, after the invention of the computer and this tool has become an essential part in many new sectors. The education sector is no exception and the modern education system is so deeply rooted in the computer and internet technology that without these two, modern educations would become meaningless. Who could have thought only 40 years ago that computer would be used in rural classrooms, modern online based distance education system and in medical colleges? In fact, the modernization in education was possible because of the invention and widespread uses of the computer and internet technology. From physics to aeronautical engineering, chemistry to modern arts, computers are used in everywhere. A complex chemical reaction can be simulated using a computer, the trainee pilots can simulate the real flight in a computer system and even the students in fine arts can learn the digital arts which are created using computers. The changes in education and uses of computers have become a common phenomenon nowadays and a school without a computer lab is considered a primitive one. Math, Physics, Chemistry, engineering, medical, business & commerce subjects can all be better taught using computers. Even arts subjects can be better taught using computers. Subjects that directly involve computers like computer science, computer engineering, electrical engineering, graphics designing etc. can’t be conducted without the help of computers.
There are still some aspects of education that require human touches and involvements and can’t be done using a computer. For instance, teaching morality, discipline and responsibility are done by teachers apart from delivering lectures on subject matters and that can’t be done using machines. A student learns many more aspects from the teachers and classmates and that can’t be done using computers. The creativity and leadership quality are two other aspects that are nurtured and inspired by humans and machine can’t take responsibilities for these issues. In summary, computers can enhance the scope of better education in almost all of the subjects except teaching some values and moralities of life that can only be taught by humans.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct preposition Original: in Suggested revision: of Why it matters: The noun phrase requires “part of” rather than “part in.”
- 2. Use uncountable noun Original: educations Suggested revision: education Why it matters: “Education” is uncountable when referring to the system in general.
- 3. Use plural noun Original: computer Suggested revision: computers Why it matters: A plural noun is needed for computers in general.
- 4. Use singular form Original: uses Suggested revision: use Why it matters: “Use” is uncountable when referring generally to the adoption of technology.
- 5. Remove extra preposition Original: computers are used in everywhere Suggested revision: computers are used everywhere Why it matters: “Everywhere” functions as an adverb and does not take “in.”
- 6. Fix noun form Original: uses Suggested revision: use Why it matters: “Use” should be singular and uncountable in this general statement.
- 7. Use natural complement Original: considered a primitive one Suggested revision: considered primitive Why it matters: The adjective works directly after “considered” without the vague substitute “one.”
- 8. Use field names Original: Math, Physics, Chemistry, engineering, medical, business & commerce subjects Suggested revision: Mathematics, physics, chemistry, engineering, medicine, business and commerce Why it matters: The list needs consistent names for academic fields and formal use of “and.”
- 9. Correct subject name Original: graphics designing Suggested revision: graphic design Why it matters: “Graphic design” is the standard name of the discipline.
- 10. Choose precise verb Original: can’t be conducted Suggested revision: cannot be taught Why it matters: Subjects are taught rather than conducted in this context.
- 11. Use natural phrase Original: human touches and involvements Suggested revision: human involvement Why it matters: The singular uncountable phrase expresses the intended idea naturally.
- 12. Fix clause structure Original: teaching morality, discipline and responsibility are done Suggested revision: morality, discipline and responsibility are taught Why it matters: The revised passive construction correctly makes the three qualities the things being taught.
Suggested Rewrites
- in of
- educations education
- computer computers
- uses use
- computers are used in everywhere computers are used everywhere
- uses use
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response directly answers all three questions, maintains a clear position, and supports its claims with relevant examples from several subjects. Its main limitation is that repetition and broad lists replace fuller development in places, while frequent collocation and grammatical errors reduce precision; the highest priority is to organise distinct ideas into focused paragraphs and edit recurring article, number, and preposition errors.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
All parts of the task are answered clearly, with a consistent position and relevant examples across several educational fields.
Develop fewer examples more fully by explaining exactly how computer use improves learning in each selected subject.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses from the role of computers to their limits, but the two long paragraphs contain repetition and loosely grouped ideas.
Separate the essentiality argument, computer-assisted subjects, and human-taught qualities into focused paragraphs with clearer internal progression.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a good range of education-related vocabulary, though recurring collocation and word-form problems reduce precision.
Replace awkward combinations such as plural abstract nouns and unnatural verb-noun pairings with more idiomatic academic phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex structures is used and meaning remains clear, but article, agreement, number, and preposition errors recur.
Proofread systematically for singular-plural agreement, articles, and fixed prepositions, especially in long coordinated sentences.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Are computers essential features of modern education? What subjects can be better taught using computers? Are there aspects of a good education that cannot be taught using computers?
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