Holidays honor people or events. If you could create a new holiday, what person or event would it honor and how would you want people to celebrate it? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.
Sample Response
Every country has holidays. If I could create a new holiday, it wouldnew holiday it would be "Day of Health". I believe that many countries already have this day, but I think that my version of the holiday will be more beneficialmy day will be more beneficial because it will be celebrated at the beginning of every month. In this essay, I will give the reasons and outline the benefits of this holiday. First of all, to celebrate this day, peopleto celebrate this day people will not go to a restaurant or a movie but will instead godo not have to go to a restaurant or to a movie, but they will go to the nearest park and celebrate it by walking, jogging, inline skatingline-skating or bicycling. Some people will go to a fitness centre or a pool. Smoking will be prohibited everywhere on this day. In addition, this will beAlso, this will be a day of healthy food, freshlyfresh squeezed juice and many smiling facesa lot of smiling faces. This day will fillinspire people with energy for the rest of the month. SecondSecond of all, people will be encouragedcalled to use their carscar as littleless as possible in order to reduce air pollutionprevent the air pollution and to keep the air cleanto keep air fresh. Cars have a significant impactEvery car has a large impact on the environment. People often drive their carscar to the nearest store to buy food when they can spend five extra minutesspend 5 minutes more and get there onby foot or bicycle. Finally, "Day of Health" will help people to relax and slow downto relax, to slow down the pace of their liveslife. Life is very stressful these days. People are competing for a better job, companies and countries are competing for market share and businesscompeting for a market and business. So, this day will help people to enjoy the moments of their life, to leave their troubles behind and appreciate all they have. In summary, I believe my holiday would make people friendlier, healthier and happier.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is its concrete, varied description of how people could celebrate a recurring Day of Health, supported by clear benefits for fitness, the environment, and wellbeing. Its main limitation is that it only implies what the holiday honours and presents the entire argument as one block; the priority is to state the commemorative purpose explicitly and organise each major reason into a distinct paragraph.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The proposed holiday is clearly identified and its celebration and benefits are well developed, although what it specifically honours remains implicit.
State directly that the holiday honours health and justify more fully why a monthly observance is appropriate.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through three reasons and clear sequencing, but the response is presented as one continuous paragraph.
Separate the celebration, environmental, and wellbeing arguments into distinct paragraphs with focused topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied enough to describe exercise, pollution, and wellbeing, though several collocations are awkward or inaccurate.
Use natural phrases such as freshly squeezed juice, travel on foot, and use cars as little as possible.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex structures is used with generally clear meaning, despite recurring article, pronoun, and preposition errors.
Proofread noun phrases and prepositions, especially references to people’s cars, pollution, and methods of travel.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Holidays honor people or events. If you could create a new holiday, what person or event would it honor and how would you want people to celebrate it? Use specific reasons and details to support your answer. Use specific reasons and examples to support your position.
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