Dieting can change a person’s life for the better or ruins one’s health completely. What’s your opinion on that?
Sample Response
There have been dramatic changes in people’s lifestyleslifestyle and eating habits over the last few years. Large numbers of people are more concerned about their health and they would like to dietthey would like to do dieting, exercise and other physical activities to keeppresent themselves in good shape. Dieting is a more practical approachthe activity that is more practicable in today’s world to reduce body weight. I believe that dieting badly affects our immune and digestive systemsimmune and digestion system and makesmake us more susceptible to illness. Many people diet to lose weightdo dieting to reduce their weight without realising its detrimental effects on their bodieseffect in their body. Firstly, theyFirstly they will lack the energy for physical activitieslack in physical activities and other workworks that require hard work and strengthdemand hardworking and strength because they do not havethey are not having a sufficient food intakesufficient intake of food to produce energy that is required for such activities. This will make them lethargic and their sedentarysedimentary lifestyle contributes to weight gain. Secondly, insufficient energydeficient energy in the body will affect the immune system that would show less resistance against viruses and make people more vulnerable to diseasethe human more open for diseases. However, dieting plays a substantial role in controlling obesity and youngsters are more attracted towards this method of weight lossthis technique of weight loose. It helps them in reducing weight and also makes their body sound and finally helps them gain a good shape. In addition to this, dieting also helps in the proper functioning of various organs in the human bodyproper working of various organisms in the human body, which has also been scientifically proventhat is also scientifically proved. To sum up, I would like to say that dieting has more disadvantages that outweigh its advantages; people with healthy diet and lifestyle lead better livesspend better life than others. Therefore, dieting impedes the progress of body and increases the risk of infection from germs and virusesincrease the risk of attacking germs and viruses.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear opinion and presents a recognisable sequence of disadvantages followed by benefits. Its main limitation is that several claims are only briefly explained or are imprecise, while frequent grammar and word-choice problems reduce authority and fluency. The highest-priority improvement is to develop each central claim with a specific, logically sound explanation or example and then edit for accurate collocations and sentence structure.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained, but the supporting ideas are unevenly developed and some claims are questionable or insufficiently explained.
Develop each main reason with a concrete example and explain the difference between harmful restrictive dieting and a healthy controlled diet.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument has an understandable overall sequence, although mechanical linking and the absence of paragraph breaks weaken organisation.
Separate the introduction, disadvantages, counterpoint, and conclusion into distinct paragraphs with clearer internal progression.
Lexical Resource
The response shows some range, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word choices such as terms for lifestyle, organs, and weight loss reduce precision.
Use natural health-related collocations and check that each selected word conveys the intended meaning exactly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex structures communicates the message, but agreement, article, preposition, and clause errors recur throughout.
Prioritise subject-verb agreement and controlled complex sentences, then proofread articles and prepositions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Dieting can change a person’s life for the better or ruins one’s health completely. What’s your opinion on that?
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