Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing.
Sample Response
I absolutely agree with the statement that sometimes people should do things they do not enjoy doing. Take me for example and I can say from my own experience that doing new things explore new possibilities in front of me.
I hate to get up early. It is so relaxing to wake up without the help of an alarm clock and to lie fifteen minutes more recalling your dreams. Nevertheless, I get up at 6 o'clock every morning, put on my T-shirt and shorts and go jogging. Sometimes when I hear the sound of my alarm clock I have a strong wish to put my head under the pillow and fall asleep. Now and then I wake up at night and look at my wrist watch to check how many hours I have left. And I am the happiest person in the whole world because I have a few more hours to sleep. You may ask me "Why do I do it every morning?". Because more than I hate to get up early I love to feel the freshness of the morning air. I love to feel a little bit tired and at the same time to be so full of energy. It helps me to feel better all day long.
Moreover, I hate shopping. It is my opinion that shopping takes too much time which I can spend doing things I enjoy doing. Nevertheless every week I go to the nearest supermarket because otherwise my refrigerator will be empty and I can not afford to have dinner at the restaurant every day. Besides, I like to cook. So, a few hours spent on shopping makes me happy for the whole week. Is not it great?
From my point of view when a man has to do things that he does not like to, he becomes stronger, more responsible and can enjoy life.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix subject agreement Original: explore Suggested revision: explores Why it matters: The gerund phrase is singular and requires explores.
- 2. Use natural phrasing Original: new possibilities in front of me Suggested revision: new possibilities for me Why it matters: The original spatial expression is unnatural for opportunities.
- 3. Fix time expression Original: to lie fifteen minutes more Suggested revision: to lie in bed fifteen minutes longer Why it matters: Longer is required for an additional duration.
- 4. Keep pronouns consistent Original: your Suggested revision: my Why it matters: The paragraph is written from the first-person perspective.
- 5. Use natural collocation Original: wish Suggested revision: urge Why it matters: Urge is the natural noun for an immediate impulse.
- 6. Use concise verb Original: look at my wrist watch Suggested revision: check my wristwatch Why it matters: Check is more concise than look at in this context.
- 7. Clarify the measure Original: how many hours I have left Suggested revision: how many hours of sleep I have left Why it matters: This specifies what the remaining hours refer to.
- 8. Remove weak opener Original: And I am the happiest Suggested revision: I am the happiest Why it matters: The coordinating conjunction is unnecessary here.
- 9. Reduce exaggeration Original: in the whole world Suggested revision: at that moment Why it matters: This preserves the emotion without an extreme claim.
- 10. Use concise wording Original: a little bit tired Suggested revision: slightly tired Why it matters: The revision is more concise and formal.
- 11. Use concise adjective Original: so full of energy Suggested revision: energised Why it matters: A single precise adjective replaces the wordy phrase.
- 12. Use correct relative form Original: time which I can spend Suggested revision: time that I could spend Why it matters: Could matches the unreal alternative use of the time.
Suggested Rewrites
- explore explores
- new possibilities in front of me new possibilities for me
- to lie fifteen minutes more to lie in bed fifteen minutes longer
- your my
- wish urge
- look at my wrist watch check my wristwatch
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear position and uses vivid personal examples to show why unpleasant activities can produce practical benefits. Its main limitation is that the jogging anecdote is disproportionately long and the broader claim about becoming stronger and more responsible is asserted rather than developed. Prioritise concise examples linked explicitly to general reasons, such as health, necessity, discipline, and long-term benefit.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear and supported by relevant examples, but much of the jogging detail is descriptive while the broader reasons remain underdeveloped.
Build two general reasons for accepting unenjoyable tasks and use each personal example briefly as evidence rather than as the main argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction, two themed body paragraphs, and a conclusion, though the first example is overextended and some links are conversational.
Condense the sleep-related details and use each paragraph's opening and closing sentences to connect the example to the central claim.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is sufficient and sometimes expressive, but several phrases are repetitive or unnatural and the register is occasionally too conversational.
Use concise academic expressions such as broaden opportunities, maintain self-discipline, meet practical needs, and gain long-term benefits.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Simple and complex sentences communicate the argument clearly, but agreement, pronoun, clause, inversion, and punctuation errors recur.
Correct structures such as doing new things explores, a few hours make, and is it not, while avoiding sentence fragments.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People should sometimes do things that they do not enjoy doing.
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