These days it is much easier for many people travel to another country for tourism than in the past. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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International tourism is growing in popularity; this growing trend sparks a fierce debate regarding its overall effect. Although international tourism adversely affects the environment, these detrimental effects are outweighed by the benefits to tourists and the local economy,local economy, provided that effective measuresmeasure are taken.

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International tourism broadens tourists' mindsmind. In the past, people could only stay in their own country, which meant they were more likely to have insufficient knowledge about other countries. However, traveling to other countries enables them to understand and accept others' beliefsbelief and customs or simply to appreciate the beautiful landscape in other countries. For example, when tourists taste sushi firsthandthemselves in Japan, they can have a better understanding of Japanesetheir food culture; when tourists explorewhen visitors visit New Zealand, they will be amazed by its natural beauty.

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In addition, international tourism contributes to the local economy.to local economy.

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Tourists' daily demand for various services (e.g., accommodation, dining, and transportation), creates employment opportunities. Positions such as hotel staff, cooks, and tour guides are created to address these needs. A case in point is the cityCity tourism in Tokyo: it allows many local people to provide services in restaurantsprovide service at restaurant as waiters, to sell products as shop assistantsassistant, and to work as translators.

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However, this boom can have an adverse effect on the environment.

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Tourists' daily activities produce a large amount of waste; when not properly treated, the waste causes damage togives rise to damage to local environment and local biodiversity. A case in point is Thailand, where plastic bottles and bags left by visitors polluted famous local islandsthe local famous island.

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In conclusion, although international tourism inevitably has an adverse effect on the environment,on environment, governments usually take proactive stepsact positively to mitigate the problems due to the benefits to tourists and the local economy.and local economy. The status quo should be maintained, in which international tourism continues to boom.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The essay presents a clear position on why the advantages of international tourism outweigh its environmental disadvantages, supported by relevant examples. The response demonstrates strong vocabulary and complex grammatical structures, though paragraphing is fragmented by single-sentence headers. Consolidating isolated sentences into cohesive body paragraphs and expanding on environmental solutions will significantly improve the overall organization and depth of argument.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.0
Scoring rule

The task is fully addressed with a clear overall position and well-supported main ideas regarding both benefits and drawbacks.

Next step

Elaborate further on how effective mitigation measures balance the negative impacts to strengthen the comparative evaluation.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

Cohesion is clear within paragraphs, but isolated single-sentence topic lines break the visual and structural flow of the essay.

Next step

Merge single sentence headings directly into the main body paragraphs to build coherent and cohesive blocks of text.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

A good range of topic-specific vocabulary is used naturally with minor errors in noun forms.

Next step

Check plural noun endings and collocation precision in complex phrases to enhance vocabulary accuracy.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

A strong variety of complex structures is displayed with a high proportion of clear, accurate sentences.

Next step

Focus on consistent article usage and plural agreement within longer complex sentences.