Pollution and other environmental problems are resulting from a country's developing and becoming richer. Some think this cannot be avoided. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Environmental problems and pollutionpollutions are often considered to be the direct result of a country’s development. Industrialisation, a growing number of factoriesgrowing number of factories, people’s capability of purchasing more cars and electronic devices, etc.electronic device etc. are often related to economic conditionsthe economic condition and growth of a nation. However, I do not agree that pollution and other environmental problems are caused solely bycaused only because of the economic growth of a country and that this cannot be avoided.
First, it does not take an expert to understand that pollution and environmental problems are more prominent in poor countries than that of rich countries. Air, noise and water pollutionAir, sound and water pollutions in countries like India and Bangladesh are far more dangerousfar dangerous than in developed countriesthan that of developed countries like Australia, Canada and the UK. Furthermore, the number of factories does not represent the amount of pollution it causes. For instance, recent researchresearches have made it clear that only a few garments factories in a country like Bangladesh cause far more damage to the air and water resources than hundreds of bigger industries do in the United States.
Second, economic development does not mean that a country will have industries and factories all over the country. Proper planning and government inspectioninspection from the government can ensure minimal emissionsthe minimal emission of gases and other toxic substancesgas and other toxic elements into the water and air. So even if industrialisationeven if the industrialisation is necessaryimminent for the development of a country, it does not mean that we will have no way to minimise the pollution and environmental issues. For instance, industrialisation does not cause as much deforestation as it is caused by human greed and lack of inspection and law in many countries.
Finally, pollution is a global issue and appropriate laws and their enforcementproper law and enforcement of laws can reduce it to a great extent. We cannot stop the natural causes of pollution but the greater percentages of environmental pollutions are caused by the human actions. We should educate people, encourage them and enforce strict laws to save our environment while development of a country has nothing to do with the rampant pollution we can see nowadays in many cities.
In conclusion, I would agree that development and industrialisation affect the environment negatively to some extent but this is not the prime factor in polluting our environment. We still have time and many optionstime and lot of options to reduce the pollutions and environmental problems to make the world a better place for the future generationsgeneration.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response maintains a clear, nuanced disagreement and organises several relevant arguments about regulation, planning, and the weak link between national wealth and unavoidable pollution. Its main limitation is that some comparisons and examples are asserted too broadly, while recurring language errors reduce accuracy. The highest-priority improvement is to build each claim through tighter cause-and-effect reasoning and then edit plural forms, comparisons, articles, and collocations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses the claim directly, sustains a clear position, and develops several relevant reasons why environmental damage can be limited, although some evidence is overgeneralised.
Use more carefully qualified examples and explain exactly how each one demonstrates that pollution is avoidable during development.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses clearly from cross-country comparison to planning and legal solutions, with effective paragraphing despite some repetition.
Reduce repeated statements about regulation and make the logical connection between economic growth, governance, and pollution explicit in each body paragraph.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a broad topic-specific vocabulary, but recurring plural, collocation, and word-choice problems reduce precision and naturalness.
Review countable and uncountable environmental terms and replace inaccurate combinations such as researches, pollutions, and imminent industrialisation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is a good range of complex sentence forms, but regular errors in articles, comparison structures, agreement, and noun phrases remain noticeable.
Proofread comparisons and long noun phrases carefully, checking article use, singular-plural agreement, and clause structure.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Pollution and other environmental problems are resulting from a country's developing and becoming richer. Some think this cannot be avoided. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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