Top level authorities of a company should always take employees’ suggestions or ideas to take any decisions.

Sample Response

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In today's competitive world, it has become essential for all organisations to do their best in every sphere of their business. Innovative ideasInnovations and new ideas have become somewhat indispensablebecome, somewhat indispensable to be able to remain competitiveremain as a part of the competition. Now, the question is who in the organisation should take part in ensuring the business survivesmaking the business survive? One group of people thinksthink that it should be the higher management, whereas anotherwhereas, another group of thought believes that people at all levelsbelieves people across all levels should be encouraged to give their ideas wherever possiblewhere ever possible. It is a fact that people working in athe particular area know the ins and outs of the processes involved in performing that jobprocesses involved to perform that job. He is the best person to come upout with ideas which can increase outputprovide a higher output for the organisation in that particular area. For this reason, in many manufacturing companieshouses labourers are given incentives for each new idea they come up with. Such companies value the thoughts of every employeeits each and every employee. On the other hand, there are companies which believe that it should be the duty of only the higher management to come up with innovations and decisions. Management has a belief that taking ideas and suggestionssuggestion from everybody would only lead to chaos. Employees may provide suggestion having a personal interest, which could be harmful to the company. Innovations and ideas are something which has brought us to this technologically developed world. Perhaps, it has been accepted by all by now. An organisation can only flourishflourish well where its employees are given the freedom to innovate and rewarded for doing sorewarded for the same. Top-level managementTop level management should be smart enough to judge its plausibility of implementation, as the final decision has to be taken by them.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response presents a relevant discussion of employee input and managerial authority, supports both perspectives, and ends with a clear position that staff should contribute while management retains final responsibility. Its main weakness is presentation as one continuous paragraph, which obscures the argumentative stages, while recurring grammatical and collocational errors reduce precision. The highest priority is to divide the argument into purposeful paragraphs and edit agreement, pronoun, and noun-form errors.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.0
Scoring rule

The central issue is addressed with relevant reasons for employee participation, a counterargument, and a clear qualified position.

Next step

Develop the concern about self-interested suggestions more fully by explaining how managerial review can mitigate that risk.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

5.5
Scoring rule

The argument follows a broadly logical sequence, but the absence of paragraph breaks makes the organisation difficult to see at a glance.

Next step

Use separate paragraphs for the introduction, employee-input case, management counterargument, and final position.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

Vocabulary is adequate and sometimes varied, but awkward combinations and imprecise expressions occur repeatedly.

Next step

Replace phrases such as group of thought and come out with ideas with more natural academic collocations.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates meaning clearly, although agreement, pronoun, article, plural, and punctuation errors recur.

Next step

Proofread systematically for subject-verb agreement and consistent singular-plural reference, especially around employees, companies, ideas, and suggestions.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Top level authorities of a company should always take employees’ suggestions or ideas to take any decisions.

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