Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their works from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employees. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
There are many high-end computers and modems available in the market using which we can set up the same type of environment as office and can have a better privilege to work from home. I do not think that's a good practice to work for office staying at home. It affects the work in various mean and spoils work culture of an office. Many companies follow a dress code for employees and ask them to maintain 9 to 5 job timing. Being at home they need not bother about their dress code and the timings, but usually, people do not maintain a proper discipline to work, sometimes they are very late to send a response to their emails just because they start accomplishing their personal work in mid of office time without informing their co-workers. Though, they show their status as available but actually they remain busy in taking a nap sometimes or doing their household work hence, they cannot be more productive for their employer being at home. Yet at the response of above working from home, employees would not be able to get the full update of work via email which causes rework sometimes. Moreover, they cannot visit their team member in case of delay to achieve targets and meet deadlines in time. Therefore, work from home option is good in some scenarios like health issues with you or your family members or some very important work where your presence is required and you are not supposed to take leave etc. We should not misuse the facilities and privileges given to us, which can bring problems and put us in soup. We should always beware of the wrong move.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix relative phrase Original: using which we can set up Suggested revision: with which we can create Why it matters: 'With which' is the correct relative construction for instruments.
- 2. Add preposition and article Original: same type of environment as office Suggested revision: same type of environment as in an office Why it matters: The comparison requires 'in' and the singular countable noun needs an article.
- 3. Fix collocation Original: have a better privilege to work Suggested revision: have the privilege of working Why it matters: The established construction is 'the privilege of' followed by a gerund.
- 4. Clarify construction Original: that's a good practice to work for office staying at home Suggested revision: it is good practice to work for an office from home Why it matters: The replacement fixes the article, pronoun reference and awkward participial phrase.
- 5. Use correct expression Original: mean Suggested revision: ways Why it matters: 'Means' would require a different construction; 'in various ways' is idiomatic here.
- 6. Use natural wording Original: spoils work culture of an office Suggested revision: damages an office's work culture Why it matters: 'Damages' and the possessive noun form a more natural collocation.
- 7. Use standard term Original: 9 to 5 job timing Suggested revision: nine-to-five working hours Why it matters: This is the conventional phrase for a fixed daily schedule.
- 8. Add introductory comma Original: Being at home they Suggested revision: Being at home, they Why it matters: A comma should follow the introductory participial phrase.
- 9. Use precise verb Original: need not bother about Suggested revision: do not need to follow Why it matters: Employees follow a dress code or schedule rather than 'bother about' it.
- 10. Fix collocation Original: a proper discipline to work Suggested revision: proper work discipline Why it matters: The original noun-and-infinitive combination is unnatural.
- 11. Fix run-on sentence Original: sometimes they are very late Suggested revision: and sometimes they are very late Why it matters: A coordinating conjunction is needed to connect this clause to the preceding one.
- 12. Use concise verb Original: send a response to their emails Suggested revision: respond to emails Why it matters: The verb 'respond' expresses the meaning more directly.
Suggested Rewrites
- using which we can set up with which we can create
- same type of environment as office same type of environment as in an office
- have a better privilege to work have the privilege of working
- that's a good practice to work for office staying at home it is good practice to work for an office from home
- mean ways
- spoils work culture of an office damages an office's work culture
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response's strongest feature is a clear, qualified disagreement supported by recognisable concerns about distraction, delayed communication and reduced coordination at home. Its effectiveness is limited by a single unstructured paragraph, several overgeneralised assumptions about remote workers, and frequent language errors that make parts difficult to follow. Prioritise two focused body paragraphs—one on productivity and one on collaboration—with realistic examples and a concise conclusion that restates the qualified position.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear disagreement is maintained and relevant productivity and communication concerns are offered, but development relies on broad assumptions and the qualified exception is only briefly explained.
Support the productivity and teamwork arguments with realistic workplace examples, then explain clearly why occasional remote work remains useful in specific circumstances.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main stance is traceable, but the entire essay forms one paragraph and long run-on sentences, misused connectors and abrupt shifts weaken progression.
Create an introduction, two focused body paragraphs and a conclusion, and use one clear logical connector between complete sentences.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough vocabulary to discuss discipline, productivity and teamwork, but frequent inaccurate collocations and informal expressions limit clarity.
Replace phrases such as 'in various mean', 'in mid of office time' and 'put us in soup' with precise formal alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex ideas are attempted, but frequent article, preposition, agreement, punctuation and clause-structure errors cause several sentences to be difficult to process.
Break the longest sentences into shorter units and remove faulty double-linking patterns such as 'Though ... but' before checking articles and prepositions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their works from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employees. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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