Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their works from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employees. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
There are many high-end computers and modems available in the market with which we can createusing which we can set up the same type of environment as in an officesame type of environment as office and can have the privilege of workinghave a better privilege to work from home. I do not think it is good practice to work for an office from homethat's a good practice to work for office staying at home. It affects the work in various waysmean and damages an office's work culturespoils work culture of an office. Many companies follow a dress code for employees and ask them to maintain nine-to-five working hours9 to 5 job timing. Being at home, theyBeing at home they do not need to followneed not bother about their dress code and the timings, but usually, people do not maintain proper work disciplinea proper discipline to work, and sometimes they are very latesometimes they are very late to respond to emailssend a response to their emails just because they start accomplishing their personal work in the middle of working hoursin mid of office time without informing their co-workers. Although they showThough, they show their status as available but actually they remain busy taking a napbusy in taking a nap sometimes or doing their household work; hence,household work hence, they are less productivecannot be more productive for their employer whilebeing at home. Another disadvantage of working from home is thatYet at the response of above working from home, employees would not be able to receive complete work updatesget the full update of work via email which causes rework sometimes. Moreover, they cannot visit their team membersmember in case of delay to achieve targets and meet deadlines in time. Therefore, work from home option is good in some scenarios like health issues with you or your family members or some very important work where your presence is required and you are not supposed to take leave etc. We should not misuse the facilities and privileges given to us, which can bring problems and put us in soup. We should always beware of the wrong move.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response's strongest feature is a clear, qualified disagreement supported by recognisable concerns about distraction, delayed communication and reduced coordination at home. Its effectiveness is limited by a single unstructured paragraph, several overgeneralised assumptions about remote workers, and frequent language errors that make parts difficult to follow. Prioritise two focused body paragraphs—one on productivity and one on collaboration—with realistic examples and a concise conclusion that restates the qualified position.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear disagreement is maintained and relevant productivity and communication concerns are offered, but development relies on broad assumptions and the qualified exception is only briefly explained.
Support the productivity and teamwork arguments with realistic workplace examples, then explain clearly why occasional remote work remains useful in specific circumstances.
Coherence and Cohesion
The main stance is traceable, but the entire essay forms one paragraph and long run-on sentences, misused connectors and abrupt shifts weaken progression.
Create an introduction, two focused body paragraphs and a conclusion, and use one clear logical connector between complete sentences.
Lexical Resource
The response has enough vocabulary to discuss discipline, productivity and teamwork, but frequent inaccurate collocations and informal expressions limit clarity.
Replace phrases such as 'in various mean', 'in mid of office time' and 'put us in soup' with precise formal alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex ideas are attempted, but frequent article, preposition, agreement, punctuation and clause-structure errors cause several sentences to be difficult to process.
Break the longest sentences into shorter units and remove faulty double-linking patterns such as 'Though ... but' before checking articles and prepositions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Computers and modems have made it possible for office workers to do much of their works from home instead of working in offices every day. Working from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employees. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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