Some languages die every year and English is becoming used more and more as a world language. Many people feel this is a positive trend and that the world with fewer languages promotes harmony and understanding between people. Analyse both sides of this argument and provide your opinion.
Sample Response
In the contemporary world, people's livespeoples' lives are shaped byare progressed pursuant to the changes that globalisation brings to societybrings to the society. Popular western cultures have altered the overall linguistic practice around the globe, establishing English as a dominant language while leaving other minority languages under threatminor languages in threat. Some argue that such a trend can allow global citizens to achieve harmony by removing communication barriersthrough destructing a communicational barrier while others state the opposite opinion. These two divergent ideas will be analysed in the following paragraphs, supported by relevant examples.
Having English as a common language can ease possible difficulties arising from language barriersdifficulties arisen by language barriers. One can readily recount incidents involving peopleincidences of people having conversational problems when travelling overseas. Not being able to understand foreign languages disablesdisable people from comprehending other people’s ideasforeigners' thoughts and bonding with them. ConsequentlyConsequentially, this may cause some to develop biased or negative perceptions of people from other countries. Therefore, if the citizens of the world could speak one or fewer languages, troubles generated by language barriers would be minimised, creatingwould be minimised and create a harmonious society.
However, the disappearance of a language may result in a loss of a nation's cultural identity. Languages not only representdo not only represent verbal practice by humans but also reflect a country’s traditionsreflect on a country's traditions. For example, the Korean language includes two different ways of expressing words depending on which age group one belongs to. If such a linguistically diverse practiceIf such as a linguistically diversified activity werewas to be replaced by English, the nation would lose its historical custom that had been maintained for centuries.
In conclusion, the aforementioned ideas suggest two varying opinions about having fewer languages in the world. I personally believe that where possibleevery language should be preserved to keep its individual identity and characteristics.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The essay presents a clear, well-organised comparison and supports its preference for preserving languages with a relevant cultural example and strong topic vocabulary. The case for a shared language is narrower, relying mainly on travel communication, while some grammar and collocations remain awkward; deepen that side with a concrete benefit in education, trade, or diplomacy, then refine verb patterns and phrasing for greater accuracy.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay analyses both sides and gives a clear opinion in favour of preserving languages. The argument is relevant and developed, though the positive side could include a little more depth beyond travel communication.
Add one more concrete benefit of a common language, such as education, trade, or diplomacy, before presenting the cultural-loss argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure is clear, with an introduction, two body paragraphs, and conclusion. Cohesion is generally effective, though some linking is formal and a few ideas could be connected more smoothly.
Use less formulaic signposting and make the contrast between harmony and cultural identity more explicit.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is strong and topic-appropriate, including linguistic practice, dominant language, cultural identity, and language barriers. A few word choices are inaccurate or unnatural.
Refine collocations such as remove communication barriers, threaten minority languages, and preserve cultural identity.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is a good range of complex structures, but several grammar errors with word forms, participles, and verb patterns reduce accuracy.
Check that verbs after modal or passive structures have the correct form and that noun modifiers are natural.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some languages die every year and English is becoming used more and more as a world language. Many people feel this is a positive trend and that the world with fewer languages promotes harmony and understanding between people. Analyse both sides of this argument and provide your opinion.
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