It is very clear now that English should be the primary foreign language taught in all schools around the world. Learning a different foreign language before English is, in today’s world, a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
English is the most widely-spoken language in the world. In fact, it has gained so much importance in so many countries that it has become an international language. However, other languages like German, French and Spanish are also taught in schools and colleges as well in many countries. My opinion is that giving other foreign languages priority over the English language in schools is not a good idea.
Over the decade, many people from different cultures and countries have adopted the trend of going and study abroad. Many of them choose to start their careers there as well. At this point, they need to understand and speak English very well. It will help them to communicate with others and they have a better chance to of growth in their fields. From academic success till better presentation skill, from better persuasion till important international meeting and conference, English is needed everywhere. The knowledge of the second language is important but none of them excels the necessity of knowing English and this is why the schools should give priority to English over other foreign languages.
Learning English as a second language is being essential nowadays, as, people around the world understands English. It makes easier for you to visit any country. Most of the T V channels are in English. All information on the Internet is in English. If you know English you have better job or study opportunities as well. Learning other languages can only be beneficial as a hobby or if you are planning to visit that particular country. Other than that, I firmly agree that English is the necessity of today’s life.
To conclude, it is clearly understood that learning English is more constructive than any other foreign language. So a priority should be given in schools to teach English as a second language over other languages.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Fix adverb placement Original: as well in many countries Suggested revision: in many countries as well Why it matters: As well is normally placed at the end of this phrase.
- 2. Use a suitable timeframe Original: Over the decade Suggested revision: Over recent decades Why it matters: The present-perfect verb describes a broad continuing trend rather than one specified decade.
- 3. Fix verb coordination Original: going and study abroad Suggested revision: going abroad to study Why it matters: The coordinated verb forms are incompatible in the original phrase.
- 4. Clarify the reference Original: At this point Suggested revision: In these situations Why it matters: The revised linker refers clearly to studying and beginning a career abroad.
- 5. Fix the noun phrase Original: The knowledge of the second language Suggested revision: Knowledge of a second language Why it matters: The general claim requires no article before knowledge and an indefinite article before second language.
- 6. Use an accurate comparison Original: none of them excels the necessity of knowing English Suggested revision: none is as necessary as English Why it matters: Excel does not express the intended comparison of necessity.
- 7. Use the stative form Original: is being essential Suggested revision: is essential Why it matters: Essential describes a state here, so the progressive form is inappropriate.
- 8. Remove the misplaced comma Original: as, people Suggested revision: as people Why it matters: A comma must not separate the conjunction from its clause subject.
- 9. Add the object Original: It makes easier for you Suggested revision: It makes it easier for people Why it matters: Make requires the object it before the adjective complement in this construction.
- 10. Use standard terminology Original: Most of the T V channels Suggested revision: Most television channels Why it matters: Television is the standard formal term, and most directly modifies the plural noun without of the.
- 11. Punctuate the condition Original: If you know English you Suggested revision: If you know English, you Why it matters: A comma should separate the initial conditional clause from the main clause.
- 12. Use formal parallel terms Original: better job or study opportunities Suggested revision: better employment or educational opportunities Why it matters: The revised nouns create a more formal and parallel expression.
Suggested Rewrites
- as well in many countries in many countries as well
- Over the decade Over recent decades
- going and study abroad going abroad to study
- At this point In these situations
- The knowledge of the second language Knowledge of a second language
- none of them excels the necessity of knowing English none is as necessary as English
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay presents a clear, consistent position and organizes relevant reasons around study, work, travel, and communication. Its main limitation is that support remains broad and sometimes exaggerated, while recurring grammatical and collocational errors reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to develop one or two claims with specific, credible examples and edit sentence structures and word combinations so that the argument sounds more controlled and persuasive.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained throughout and supported with relevant reasons, although several claims are generalized rather than convincingly evidenced.
Develop fewer reasons in greater depth with specific examples that demonstrate why English should take priority in schools.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay progresses logically through distinct reasons and uses clear paragraphing, though some transitions and lists are mechanical or awkward.
Strengthen progression by giving each body paragraph one central claim and linking every supporting sentence directly to it.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficient range of vocabulary for education and international communication, but inaccurate collocations recur throughout.
Replace awkward combinations such as 'chance to of growth' with natural, precise phrasing and avoid overstated absolute claims.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The essay uses both simple and complex sentences, but recurring errors in agreement, verb patterns, articles, and punctuation reduce control.
Proofread complex sentences for subject-verb agreement and verb complements, especially forms following 'going,' 'help,' and impersonal constructions.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
It is very clear now that English should be the primary foreign language taught in all schools around the world. Learning a different foreign language before English is, in today’s world, a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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