Some people think that enjoying the present is more important than planning for the future for both countries and individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Nowadays, the world has changed day by day, and it happens almost everywhere. Some people think that enjoying the moment that is happening now is essential compared to planning about the future early. At the same time, other people claim that it is crucial to prepare for the future as soon as possible. I agree with the last argument. From my point of view, by thinking about the future, we will be careful of each decision or either plan that we will make to reduce dissatisfaction the next day.
First, thinking carefully about the future is a great idea to change the current situation. People who plan their lives tend to have a quality of life much better due to their time management. For instance, people who prepare for a career path 5 to 10 years later would be more diligent and spend their time wisely in order to reach their goals. They do not even think about wasting their time and being lazy at the same time.
Furthermore, people who prepare for the future will always think about the probability as well, both good and bad. Moreover, they will learn how to deal with unexpected answers. So, they always have plan B and plan C if they cannot reach their goals. Future plans are necessary for people, even countries. As we know, everything is always developing, so we must think about the worst possible way to keep continuing our life and protect civilization from anxiety and depression.
Finally, when we have time to think about our future and plans, we have more moments to rest without concerns and hardships. Therefore, having control over decisions in advance may be a way not only to organize schedules but also to manage routines.
To sum up, although enjoying the moment is important, thinking about the future is more advisable. Thus, organization, thinking in advance, and planning more than one option for both individuals and society is a good way to manage complications on the other day.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use direct comparison Original: essential compared to Suggested revision: more important than Why it matters: This phrase needs the comparative form that directly matches the contrast between present enjoyment and future planning.
- 2. Correct planning phrase Original: planning about the future early Suggested revision: planning early for the future Why it matters: We plan for the future rather than plan about it.
- 3. Signal contrast clearly Original: At the same time, other people Suggested revision: In contrast, other people Why it matters: The second view contrasts with the first rather than occurring simultaneously.
- 4. Use precise reference Original: the last argument Suggested revision: the latter view Why it matters: The latter view is the conventional way to refer to the second of two positions.
- 5. Fix preposition and determiner Original: careful of each decision or either plan Suggested revision: careful about every decision or plan Why it matters: Careful takes about here, and either is incorrect when the alternatives are not limited to two.
- 6. Express future consequence Original: dissatisfaction the next day Suggested revision: dissatisfaction in the future Why it matters: The next day incorrectly narrows a general claim about long-term planning to one day.
- 7. Clarify the benefit Original: a great idea to change the current situation Suggested revision: an effective way to improve the current situation Why it matters: The revision states the intended benefit more precisely and uses the natural collocation improve a situation.
- 8. Fix adjective order Original: a quality of life much better Suggested revision: a much better quality of life Why it matters: The comparative adjective phrase must come before the noun phrase quality of life.
- 9. Use future time phrase Original: 5 to 10 years later Suggested revision: five to ten years ahead Why it matters: Ahead expresses a future point measured from the present, whereas later requires a stated reference point.
- 10. Match general claim Original: would be more diligent Suggested revision: are likely to be more diligent Why it matters: A present-tense form suits this general statement and avoids an unsupported hypothetical conditional.
- 11. Use natural collocation Original: think about the probability as well, both good and bad Suggested revision: consider both positive and negative possibilities Why it matters: Possibilities can be positive or negative, while a probability is a numerical likelihood rather than an outcome.
- 12. Choose accurate noun Original: answers Suggested revision: outcomes Why it matters: Outcomes describes unforeseen results, while answers does not fit this context.
Suggested Rewrites
- essential compared to more important than
- planning about the future early planning early for the future
- At the same time, other people In contrast, other people
- the last argument the latter view
- careful of each decision or either plan careful about every decision or plan
- dissatisfaction the next day dissatisfaction in the future
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear preference for future planning and supports it with a sensible progression from goal-setting to contingency planning and better-managed routines. Its main limitation is that development remains general and focuses overwhelmingly on individuals, despite the prompt also referring to countries, while several awkward expressions reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to build one specific, well-explained national example alongside the personal arguments.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained, but support is fairly general and the country dimension receives little meaningful development.
Develop a concrete example of how national planning produces a specific long-term benefit.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically through distinct ideas, although linking is sometimes mechanical and the final body paragraph is comparatively thin.
Use fewer formulaic linkers and connect each paragraph's explanation more explicitly to the central position.
Lexical Resource
The vocabulary is adequate and shows some range, but recurring awkward collocations reduce precision and naturalness.
Replace imprecise phrases such as unexpected answers and worst possible way with context-specific, natural wording.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex sentences communicates the argument clearly despite recurring errors in articles, agreement, and clause construction.
Proofread complex sentences for subject-verb agreement and accurate preposition and article choices.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that enjoying the present is more important than planning for the future for both countries and individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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