With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?
Sample Response
With the rapid development of technology, some people believe that face – to – face communication will be completely replacedtotally supplanted. I strongly disagree with this statement, and the reasons for this will be presented in this essay. Firstly, the point that makes in-person interaction irreplaceable is its emotional dimensionis the emotional aspects. When people have direct conversations, they do not just exchange pleasantries verballyexchange pleasantries through verbal speech but also use physical contactmake use of physical contact like hugs or handshakes. In addition, facial expressions, hand movements and eye contactFacial expressions, hand movements and eye contact, in addition, are non-verbal social cueshard-wired social cues which help confirm thatprovide confirmation that listeners are paying attention to us as we speak. These genuine feelings are something online chatting simply cannot create, because being unable to recognize any emotional elements through a computer screen makes it arduous to identify exactly what an interlocutor may obviously convey. From a security perspective, online communication is not completely secure and can be intercepted by hackerscan be accessed secretly by hackers and, in some cases, government bodies. For instance, in 2015, the NSA was found to have read all emailswas found to have been reading all emails and listening in on numerous phone calls involvingof American citizens. This was followed in 2016, whenThis was followed by 2016 when the CIA was accused of tapping the phoneaccused of having tapped the phone of Germany’s prime minister. Hundreds of security holes have been exposed in recent years, and despiterecent years and despite the fact that most of themthe most of them have been fixed, Android and Windows usersmessages of Android and Windows users were at risk of identity theft. These examples demonstrate that if any important conversations take place throughon online platforms, they are more likely to be interceptedhacked and as a result, face-to-face communication is a safer alternativeface-to-face communication is the only solution to this. In conclusion, though technology has changed the way we communicate, cyber safety and its great impact on people’s verbal and non-verbal expressions are reasons why real-life interaction can never be replaced.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response maintains a clear disagreement and develops two relevant reasons with specific explanation and examples, while using a strong range of language and sentence structures. Its main weakness is that the security argument becomes overstated and the continuous block of text obscures the otherwise clear organisation. Prioritise separating the essay into purposeful paragraphs and qualifying claims so each example supports the precise proposition being argued.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is sustained and supported by two developed arguments, though the claim that face-to-face contact is the only secure solution is too absolute.
Qualify the security argument and explain more directly why online risks mean in-person communication will remain important rather than wholly irreplaceable.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress clearly from the position through emotional and security considerations to the conclusion, but the absence of visible paragraph breaks weakens organisation.
Separate the introduction, each main reason, and the conclusion into distinct paragraphs with focused topic sentences.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is varied and often precise, with effective terms for social cues and digital security, despite several awkward or imprecise combinations.
Refine collocations and remove unnecessary intensifiers so phrases about emotional communication and online risk sound more natural and exact.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is used with generally strong control, although a few article, modifier, and reference errors remain.
Review complex sentences for article use and logical reference, especially where several clauses and modifiers are combined.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?
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