Children brought up in families with less money are better prepared for life than those from wealthy families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Money plays a pivotal role in people's social and family life, and it influences the way a child grows up and prepares to meet future challenges. Usually, rich families provide a better life for their childrencompensate better life for their children, but some people argue that children who are brought up in less wealthy families are often better prepared to face difficulties in life. However, I strongly believe that children from affluent families get better opportunities and are better preparedget better opportunities and better prepared for future challenges. On the one hand, many believe that families with less money prepare their children more effectively for realityprepare their children more realistically. Those children admittedly learn to face obstacles in childhood that giveobstacles in their childhood that gives them an advantage when they grow up. They also learn to appreciate the value of money, savings, time and hard work, and the importance of family tiestie. They are not given everythingpampered for everything they want or need, ; rather, they needrather they need to earn what they want through hard workearn them through hard work. Therefore they automatically prepare to set goals in lifeprepare for setting a target in life and make plans to pursue themmake plans for pursuing them. On the other hand, children from wealthier families are sometimes slower to learna little behind in terms of learning many important lessons in childhood than their less wealthy counterpartswhen compared with the mindset of their counterparts. However, they have all the resourcesfacilities they need for their education and future career. For instance, they are well adorned to go to the best schools, have the best teachers to teach them, money and connections to start a business or join a job, and affluent family to support them whenever needed. Furthermore, those families build the foundation for their children to begin their lives—a much-needed pushbegin their life- a much-needed push toward a better careerto have a better career. These rich children eventually learn the most important aspects of life, maybe a little later than the poor children, but they have far greater resourcesfacilities that ultimately give them advantages later in lifegive them advantages in life. To conclude, money and education help build a better futurebuild a better future life. Because of that, wealthier children have a much better and more flexible lifea much better and flexible life than poor children. Therefore, I believe children from wealthy families gainget a competitive advantage over children from poor families in terms of education and preparation for the future.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear disagreement and usefully compares the resilience learned in poorer families with the educational and financial advantages available to wealthier children. Its main weaknesses are the one-block organisation and several overgeneralised or awkwardly expressed claims, which make the comparison less precise. The highest priority is to define what being prepared for life means and evaluate both forms of preparation against that definition in clearly separated paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The essay addresses the claim directly, recognises advantages on both sides, and consistently concludes that wealthy children are better prepared, though the comparison rests on broad generalisations.
Define preparation through specific dimensions such as resilience, education, and independence, then explain why the wealthy-family advantages ultimately carry greater weight.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a recognisable contrast from poorer to wealthier families and reaches a consistent conclusion, but presenting the full essay as one paragraph obscures its major stages.
Separate the introduction, each side of the comparison, and the conclusion into distinct paragraphs, using one clear topic sentence for each body section.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a reasonably varied range for wealth, education, and life skills, but inaccurate collocations such as "compensate better life," "well adorned," and "join a job" reduce naturalness.
Prefer precise combinations such as "provide a better life," "well equipped," and "secure employment," and reduce repeated references to rich and poor children.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of complex forms is attempted and the meaning remains clear, but agreement, article, pronoun-reference, and sentence-boundary errors recur throughout.
Check subject-verb agreement and reference carefully, for example "children ... are better prepared," "obstacles ... give them," and singular "a family" with appropriate pronouns.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Children brought up in families with less money are better prepared for life than those from wealthy families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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