The fashion trends nowadays change very rapidly and it is quite difficult to follow the latest trends always. Many people believe that the fashion trends primarily exist just to sell clothes and they also argue that following them is just a waste of time and we should dress what we feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
Some people say that fashion and style arefashion & style are very difficult to follow and they think that the aim of fashion and styleaim of fashion & style is only related to business and profit. They also believe that people should not follow fashion trends, and should wear clothingclothing apparel in accordance with their personal preferencesinterest and comfort. To a certain extent, I would agree that we should not always follow the latest fashion trendstrend, but under some circumstances, wearing current styleswearing an updated fashion is also important.
To begin with, it is a fact that fashion trends change rapidly nowadays. Clothes that are purchased today might be considered old-fashionedconsidered as old fashioned by the following seasonin the following semester. However, many people think that these rapid changes are drivenset by fashion designers for commercial purposes. Therefore, people do not have to follow fashion trendsstyle since it would only benefit fashion designers and manufacturers themselves. People should wear clothes that arewear dresses which are suitable and comfortable for them.
On the other hand, although it is true that people should wear clothes freely, but it is important for people to wear an up to date fashion style as well. By wearing an updated fashioned style might increase the self-confident level of the person who wears it. In additionBesides that, clothing also might affect business resultsimpact on business results as well. For example, as a marketing representative of an elite company, the representativeperson should wear the appropriate business attire, which represents the company. Their clothingHis/her clothing might impact on the sales performance of the company. In summary, fashion styles are always changing, and they are difficult to follow. Several people think that the changes are made by the fashion industryfashion people for business purposes and they believe that people should wear clothes which are suited to their personal stylein accordance with their styles.
In my opinion, it is important for people to follow fashions trends, but they do not have to follow it intensively, since wearing an update fashion style give some benefits for the individuals themselves.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The essay presents a clear qualified position and considers both personal comfort and situations where current clothing may support confidence or professional performance. Its main limitation is that several ideas are repetitive or only partly developed, while frequent awkward word choices and grammatical errors reduce precision. The priority is to deepen the two main arguments with focused explanation and express them through simpler, more accurate sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear partial-agreement position is maintained and both sides are relevant, although the commercial-purpose and confidence arguments are only moderately developed.
Explain why comfort should usually take priority and define the specific professional situations in which current fashion genuinely matters.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a logical overall structure and clear stance, but internal repetition and an unnecessary summary before the conclusion interrupt progression.
Let each body paragraph develop one reason once, then reserve all final synthesis for a single concise conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for the topic, but frequent unnatural combinations and word-form errors limit flexibility and accuracy.
Use precise phrases such as "current styles", "boost confidence", "professional image" and "fashion industry" instead of repetitive variants.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Meaning remains clear across a range of sentence types, though agreement, article and clause errors occur regularly.
Correct structures such as "although..." without "but", "wearing current styles may increase confidence", and "fashion trends give benefits".
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The fashion trends nowadays change very rapidly and it is quite difficult to follow the latest trends always. Many people believe that the fashion trends primarily exist just to sell clothes and they also argue that following them is just a waste of time and we should dress what we feel comfortable in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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