Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem?
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Sample Response
Fast Food as the name indicates the availability of food to eat in a jiffy. The main reason for growththe flourish and success of fast food is changes in lifestylethe change in the lifestyle and the competitive environment prevailing in societyprevailing in the society. Let us evaluate the success of fast foodthe success of the fast food in detail and the ways to curbkerb it by heedingheeding to the advicesayings of the doctors, nutritionists and clinical experts.
Why this response received Band 4.5
The response identifies time-pressured lifestyles as a possible reason for fast-food consumption and signals awareness that expert health advice matters. However, at only 69 words it is an unfinished introduction: the cause is not explained, no concrete solution is presented, and neither question receives developed support. Prioritise producing a complete essay of at least 250 words with separate paragraphs for causes, practical interventions, and a concise conclusion.
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Task Response
The response only names lifestyle change and competition as a cause and gestures toward expert advice, leaving both questions essentially undeveloped at 69 words.
Explain at least two causes, propose specific measures such as nutrition education or advertising controls, and support each point with reasoning or an example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The three sentences have a basic definition-reason-intention sequence, but there is too little content to establish meaningful progression or paragraph-level organisation.
Build a four-paragraph structure with an introduction, a causes paragraph, a solutions paragraph, and a conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Some relevant vocabulary is attempted, but repetition and inaccurate phrases such as 'the flourish and success' and 'heeding to the sayings' limit precision.
Use direct expressions such as 'the growth of fast-food consumption' and 'following medical advice', and develop a broader range of cause-and-solution vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex noun and verb phrases, but missing sentence elements and faulty constructions reduce grammatical control.
Write complete clauses, beginning with 'Fast food, as its name suggests, is prepared and served quickly', and check articles and prepositions throughout.