Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem?
Sample Response
Fast Food as the name indicates the availability of food to eat in a jiffy. The main reason for the flourish and success of fast food is the change in the lifestyle and the competitive environment prevailing in the society. Let us evaluate the success of the fast food in detail and the ways to kerb it by heeding to the sayings of the doctors, nutritionists and clinical experts.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use growth noun Original: the flourish Suggested revision: growth Why it matters: Flourish is not used as a noun with this meaning.
- 2. Use general plural Original: the change in the lifestyle Suggested revision: changes in lifestyle Why it matters: The general claim requires a natural uncountable use of lifestyle and a plural reference to changes.
- 3. Remove unnecessary article Original: prevailing in the society Suggested revision: prevailing in society Why it matters: Society is used without the definite article when referring to society in general.
- 4. Remove food article Original: the success of the fast food Suggested revision: the success of fast food Why it matters: Fast food is a general uncountable category here and does not take the article.
- 5. Use correct curb Original: kerb Suggested revision: curb Why it matters: Curb is the verb meaning to restrain, whereas kerb denotes the edge of a pavement.
- 6. Remove extra preposition Original: heeding to Suggested revision: heeding Why it matters: The verb heed takes a direct object without to.
- 7. Refer to advice Original: sayings Suggested revision: advice Why it matters: Advice is the appropriate word for professional recommendations.
- 8. Sentence rewrite Original: Fast Food as the name indicates the availability of food to eat in a jiffy. Suggested revision: Fast food, as its name indicates, is food that is available to eat quickly. Why it matters: The rewrite supplies the missing verb, corrects capitalization, and punctuates the parenthetical phrase.
Suggested Rewrites
- the flourish growth
- the change in the lifestyle changes in lifestyle
- prevailing in the society prevailing in society
- the success of the fast food the success of fast food
- kerb curb
- heeding to heeding
Why this response received Band 4.5
The response identifies time-pressured lifestyles as a possible reason for fast-food consumption and signals awareness that expert health advice matters. However, at only 69 words it is an unfinished introduction: the cause is not explained, no concrete solution is presented, and neither question receives developed support. Prioritise producing a complete essay of at least 250 words with separate paragraphs for causes, practical interventions, and a concise conclusion.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Detailed feedback by IELTS writing criterion after the annotated essay.
Task Response
The response only names lifestyle change and competition as a cause and gestures toward expert advice, leaving both questions essentially undeveloped at 69 words.
Explain at least two causes, propose specific measures such as nutrition education or advertising controls, and support each point with reasoning or an example.
Coherence and Cohesion
The three sentences have a basic definition-reason-intention sequence, but there is too little content to establish meaningful progression or paragraph-level organisation.
Build a four-paragraph structure with an introduction, a causes paragraph, a solutions paragraph, and a conclusion.
Lexical Resource
Some relevant vocabulary is attempted, but repetition and inaccurate phrases such as 'the flourish and success' and 'heeding to the sayings' limit precision.
Use direct expressions such as 'the growth of fast-food consumption' and 'following medical advice', and develop a broader range of cause-and-solution vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts complex noun and verb phrases, but missing sentence elements and faulty constructions reduce grammatical control.
Write complete clauses, beginning with 'Fast food, as its name suggests, is prepared and served quickly', and check articles and prepositions throughout.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Even though doctors all over the world agree that fast food is bad for people's health more and more people are eating it. Why are more people eating fast food? What can be done about this problem?
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