There are less female than male leaders in history. Why is this? Do you think that this will change in the future?
Sample Response
Our history is full of achievers and leaders. It has been observedIt had been noticed that there were fewer female leaders than male leadersthere were less female leaders as compared to male. Although this scenario has changed to a great extent nowadays, but still in the past the situation was completely opposite. This was due to different reasons.
Initially, if we look into the past we find that women were not treated equallyequal. They were denied their rights. Women had been considered as the weaker sexas weaker sex. As for being a leader a person should be able to face the harsh politics of the world, handle pressure, take decisions good or bad, need skill to handle people of different attitudes. In olden times it was the upbringing of the women that they grew into polite, caring, less violent and submissive individuals whereas men had all the qualities to lead.
Presently, women are becoming increasingly independentmore and more independent and they take an active parttake active part in the formulationformation and implementation of rules. Women are rubbing shoulders with men in every field, including education, business, politics, and defence.in every field be it heading the education system, company, politics, defense, etc. It has been proved that women are more responsible and hard working. These qualities help women pave their wayhelp women to pave their way to the highesttopmost positions in this male dominated world.
In the futureIn future it is evident that we will see many women leaders in all walks of life and they will prove that they are capable leadersthey are worth it. This can bring about a new revolutionbring new revolution in this current climate of violencecurrent violent situation. Our future generations will grow up as adults thinking with both their minds and their heartsthinking both from mind and heart just like women.
To conclude we can say that although in the past we saw fewer women leaders,although in the past we saw less women leaders but through constant hard work and tolerance women have earned the respect needed to hold increasingly responsible positionsearned respect to handle more and more responsible positions.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response answers both questions directly, giving historical inequality and gendered upbringing as causes and predicting greater female leadership based on present progress. Its organisation is clear, but some claims rely on broad stereotypes or vague assertions, while frequent grammatical and collocational problems reduce precision. The highest priority is to develop more objective cause-and-effect explanations and support the prediction with specific, credible reasoning.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both parts of the task are addressed with a clear prediction, but some supporting claims are generalised, weakly justified, or only indirectly relevant.
Develop each cause and future prediction with a concrete explanation of how social institutions, access to opportunity, or changing expectations affect leadership representation.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas are arranged in a clear chronological sequence with appropriate paragraphing, although some progression within paragraphs relies on broad assertions rather than tightly connected reasoning.
Build each paragraph around one controlling idea and use explicit cause-and-effect links to connect evidence to the main claim.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a fair range of topic vocabulary and some effective expressions, but repeated inaccurate collocations and imprecise wording reduce naturalness.
Replace broad or awkward phrases with precise language about discrimination, leadership opportunities, representation, and social change.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is an attempt to use varied sentence forms, but frequent errors with comparison forms, articles, agreement, clause structure, and double conjunctions weaken accuracy.
Review comparative forms and complex clauses, particularly avoiding combinations such as although with but and ensuring every clause has a clear grammatical structure.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
There are less female than male leaders in history. Why is this? Do you think that this will change in the future?
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