Some believe that people should make efforts to fight climate change, while others think it is better to learn to live with it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Global warming has become a moot issue among the masses. Some argue that people must attempt to combat climate change, while others consider they should adapt accordingly. In my perspective, masses combating climate change can positively reduce carbon emission, control pandemics and other climate emergencies.
First off, endeavors must be done by the masses to tackle climate change. It is ostensible that if people understand that their inhuman activities can put the world at risk. To elaborate, the number of vehicles run on the road and release toxic gases that mix in the air and are responsible for creating environmental hazards. So, they can use carpooling to reduce the emission. Moreover, variations in climate cause a dearth of famine and pandemics—the mortality rate increases. So, instead of deforestation, afforestation is lucrative to curb transformations in the environment.
On the other hand, a few masses do not have a long-term vision, which is just due to ignorance. They consider that their single action has little or no role in escalating global warming. They surprise others by saying that everything will be adjusted according to changing climate. Thus their conservative thinking exacerbating the climate conditions. They do not want to bear the financial loss. They depend on businesses that bring enormous profits for them. Instead of curbing global warming, they prefer to survive in the same climatic conditions. For example, if manufacturers are told to use eco-friendly products, then they abnegate because of the slow process of earning money rather than they produce in bulk even at the cost of emission of fossil fuels.
In conclusion, Thus, it is apparent that curtailing global warming by making arduous efforts is more demanding nowadays instead of adjusting according to the changing climate conditions. Methods apart from fighting climate alterations are useless for the existence of humanity.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Add the clause marker Original: consider they should adapt Suggested revision: consider that they should adapt Why it matters: Consider needs that here to introduce the following finite clause clearly.
- 2. Use correct expression Original: In Suggested revision: From Why it matters: From my perspective is the standard fixed expression for introducing an opinion.
- 3. Use a possessive subject Original: masses combating climate change Suggested revision: people's efforts to combat climate change Why it matters: The revised noun phrase clearly identifies the efforts as the subject of the verb.
- 4. Remove redundant adverb Original: positively reduce Suggested revision: reduce Why it matters: Reduce already expresses a beneficial decrease, so positively is redundant here.
- 5. Use the plural noun Original: emission Suggested revision: emissions Why it matters: The general environmental output is conventionally expressed with the plural count noun emissions.
- 6. Use correct collocation Original: endeavors must be done Suggested revision: efforts must be made Why it matters: Efforts are made, whereas endeavours are not normally described as being done.
- 7. Clarify the pronoun Original: they Suggested revision: people Why it matters: People provides a clear referent where they could otherwise refer to vehicles.
- 8. Use plural emissions Original: the emission Suggested revision: emissions Why it matters: Carpooling reduces emissions in general, so the plural form is needed.
- 9. Remove contradictory phrase Original: cause a dearth of famine and pandemics Suggested revision: cause famine and pandemics Why it matters: A dearth means a shortage, so a dearth of famine contradicts the intended claim.
- 10. Show the resulting effect Original: —the mortality rate increases Suggested revision: , increasing the mortality rate Why it matters: A participial phrase links the stated causes to the claimed result grammatically.
- 11. Choose the right adjective Original: lucrative Suggested revision: beneficial Why it matters: Lucrative refers to financial profit, while beneficial expresses the environmental advantage intended here.
- 12. Use precise wording Original: curb transformations in the environment Suggested revision: limit harmful environmental changes Why it matters: The revision identifies the negative changes more clearly and uses a natural collocation.
Suggested Rewrites
- consider they should adapt consider that they should adapt
- In From
- masses combating climate change people's efforts to combat climate change
- positively reduce reduce
- emission emissions
- endeavors must be done efforts must be made
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response has a clear opinion and a recognizable structure that separates the two views, with concrete references to transport, trees, and manufacturing. Its main limitation is that the adaptation view is portrayed narrowly and some explanations are inaccurate or difficult to follow, while frequent grammatical and word-choice problems weaken clarity. The highest-priority improvement is to explain each view objectively with logically accurate support before evaluating it.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views are addressed and the writer's preference is clear, but the adaptation side is treated dismissively and several supporting claims are insufficiently logical or accurate.
Explain credible reasons for adapting to unavoidable climate effects, then compare those reasons directly with the case for prevention.
Coherence and Cohesion
The four-paragraph organization and overall movement between views are clear, though progression within paragraphs is sometimes disrupted by abrupt or weakly connected claims.
Build each body paragraph around one controlling idea and show the causal link between every example and that idea.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a reasonably broad vocabulary, but frequent collocational and word-choice errors make expressions such as those about famine, afforestation, and manufacturing imprecise.
Use familiar, accurate environmental vocabulary and check noun-verb collocations instead of relying on uncommon words whose meanings do not fit.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures is attempted, but fragments, agreement errors, and malformed clauses recur and sometimes impede comprehension.
Focus on writing complete finite clauses and checking subject-verb agreement before adding complex connectors or subordinate structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some believe that people should make efforts to fight climate change, while others think it is better to learn to live with it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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