Many people believe that film is a less important art than other forms such as literature and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Film is often looked down on as a less important art form in comparison with more elevated mediums like painting and literature. In my opinion, though the blatant commercialisation of film often undermines its claim to be art at all, it is a clearly more important art form for the 21st century.
Those who would minimise the importance of film, can point out its primary purpose is to make money. This has become increasingly true in the last several decades as studios have assumed greater power. It used to be common for auteurs like Martin Scorsese, Francis Ford Coppola, and Robert Altman to make modestly budgeted films that earned decent returns. The advent of blockbuster films generally and superhero movies in particular makes it much harder for studios catering to their shareholders to justify anything other than tentpole franchises. The artistic merits of these big movies tend to be low as they are often made by committee and strive only for escapism and fan service.
However, film has clearly overtaken other forms of art in the popular imagination. Hundreds of years ago, composers, playwrights, novelists, and painters were held in higher esteem and their works were the centre of popular culture. Music and film have now displaced them. Someone who would have become a great writer in the 19th century, would now opt to make films as they can reach the greatest number of people and the medium is newer and more open to possibility. A good example of this would be a young filmmaker like P.T. Anderson who creates thoughtful, explorative works that also have a degree of mass appeal.
In conclusion, film as an art form is ascendant today. It is, however, still important for audiences to tune in to a wide breadth of genres in order to encourage the film industry to remain vibrant and innovative.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use standard plural Original: mediums Suggested revision: media Why it matters: Media is the conventional plural when referring to forms of artistic communication.
- 2. Place adverb correctly Original: it is a clearly more important art form Suggested revision: it is clearly a more important art form Why it matters: Clearly should modify the comparative phrase rather than separate the article from it.
- 3. Remove subject comma Original: film, can point Suggested revision: film can point Why it matters: A comma must not separate the subject phrase from its main verb.
- 4. Use formal wording Original: these big movies Suggested revision: these large-scale productions Why it matters: Large-scale productions is more precise and suitably formal for this context.
- 5. Improve verb choice Original: strive only for escapism and fan service Suggested revision: aim only to provide escapism and fan service Why it matters: Films can aim to provide these experiences, while strive for is awkward here.
- 6. Remove subject comma Original: 19th century, would Suggested revision: 19th century would Why it matters: The comma incorrectly separates the relative-clause subject from its main verb.
- 7. Use natural collocation Original: more open to possibility Suggested revision: more open to creative possibilities Why it matters: The plural noun phrase expresses the range of opportunities more naturally.
- 8. Choose standard adjective Original: explorative Suggested revision: exploratory Why it matters: Exploratory is the standard adjective for work that investigates ideas or possibilities.
- 9. Improve collocation Original: tune in to a wide breadth of genres Suggested revision: engage with a wide range of genres Why it matters: Engage with and a wide range are more natural choices for varied film viewing.
- 10. Sentence rewrite Original: Music and film have now displaced them. Suggested revision: Music and film have now displaced these older art forms at the centre of popular culture. Why it matters: Naming the referent removes ambiguity and links the sentence directly to the previous comparison.
Suggested Rewrites
- mediums media
- it is a clearly more important art form it is clearly a more important art form
- film, can point film can point
- these big movies these large-scale productions
- strive only for escapism and fan service aim only to provide escapism and fan service
- 19th century, would 19th century would
Why this response received Band 8.0
The response gives a clear, nuanced position and develops it through a persuasive contrast between commercial pressures and film's contemporary cultural reach. Its main limitation is that the conclusion introduces audience behaviour rather than fully consolidating the comparison with literature and painting, and a few unnecessary commas slightly weaken polish. The highest-priority improvement is to finish by explicitly synthesising why film's reach outweighs its commercial limitations.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear throughout and is supported by well-developed, relevant arguments on both commercialisation and cultural influence.
Make the conclusion explicitly weigh film against literature and painting instead of adding a new recommendation to audiences.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument progresses smoothly through a focused concession and rebuttal, with clear paragraph-level sequencing.
Strengthen the final link back to the thesis so the conclusion completes the argumentative progression more decisively.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is wide, precise, and highly flexible, including sophisticated language for artistic status and commercial production.
Maintain this precision while choosing the most exact evaluative term in phrases such as more important art form.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A wide range of complex structures is handled with strong control, and the few punctuation lapses do not affect clarity.
Remove unnecessary commas separating subjects from verbs and check punctuation around embedded clauses.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people believe that film is a less important art than other forms such as literature and painting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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