Some people think that the increasingly flexible working environment nowadays, such as working at home, has a positive impact on workers' lives. Others, however, feel this development is just a means for organisations such as private companies to exploit workers for profit. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Sample Response

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Nowadays, employers are offering a flexible working environment to their employees such as workingwork from home or any other place of their own choice. This has become possible with the advancement of technology and has therefore dramatically improvedand hence dramatically improved workers’ performance. Some people argue that flexibility in work locationfreedom of working location significantly helps in reducing time and cost incurred on travelling and other expenses. Others claim that profit-oriented companiescompanies from lucrative business often adopt this trend only to increase their profitsbecause of their profit and this is negative for the employees in the long run. Firstly, workersFirstly workers spend a large amount of money and significant timea huge amount and significant time on travelling to and from their workplaces. This expenditure has to be paidpay out of employees' pocketsfrom employee’s pockets; thus allowing them to workallowing them work from home would substantially save their money. Secondly, workingSecondly working in a relaxing and stress-free environment drastically improvessituation drastically improve the quality of work and also reduce the time needed to complete taskstime for the accomplishment of tasks. Additionally, an employee gets an opportunity to spend more quality time with their family at home. However, a large number of employeesemployee are deprived of learningdeprive off from learning basic traits of office such as teamwork, dedication, punctuality and strategic planningstrategies forming in absence of professional working environment. Moreover, companies save a substantial amountsave handsome amount as they do not have to pay for building rent, bills and other expenditure incurred in running a business. On the other hand, employee pay is not commensurate with their efforts and skills. Since many companies do not need their employees to be present physically at the office, the authorities are taking advantageadvantages of this facility and creating negative impacts on the employee's future career. To sum up I would like to say professional workplaces provide a more conducive learning and working environment than homesprovide conducive learning and working environment than homes. Companies with free choice of work location are the main deterrent in employee’s future progress, as jobs ethics and behaviours can only be learned while working at a workplace.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response addresses both perspectives and reaches a clear opinion, with useful explanation of commuting savings, family time, workplace learning, and employer costs. Its main weakness is that the exploitation argument remains only partly developed, while the single-paragraph structure and frequent language errors blur the contrast between views. Prioritise separate body paragraphs and explain exactly how remote-work savings could translate into underpayment or career disadvantage for employees.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.0
Scoring rule

Both views and a clear preference for conventional workplaces are presented, but the claim that companies exploit remote workers is not fully explained.

Next step

Show a precise mechanism of exploitation, such as transferring office costs to staff, extending unpaid availability, or using location flexibility to suppress pay.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.0
Scoring rule

The argument moves recognisably from benefits to disadvantages and opinion, but presenting the entire essay as one paragraph weakens progression and comparison.

Next step

Use an introduction, one body paragraph for worker benefits, one for organisational exploitation, and a separate conclusion.

LR

Lexical Resource

5.5
Scoring rule

The essay attempts a useful range of work-related vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate combinations such as 'companies from lucrative business', 'deprive off', and 'save handsome amount' reduce precision.

Next step

Use natural forms such as 'profit-driven companies', 'be deprived of', and 'save a substantial amount', checking collocations systematically.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

5.5
Scoring rule

A mixture of sentence forms communicates the main ideas, though frequent agreement, article, plural, and verb-form errors weaken control.

Next step

Check every subject-verb pair and passive form, revising phrases such as 'has to be pay' to 'has to be paid' and 'working ... improve' to 'working ... improves'.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Some people think that the increasingly flexible working environment nowadays, such as working at home, has a positive impact on workers' lives. Others, however, feel this development is just a means for organisations such as private companies to exploit workers for profit. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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