Some people think that foreign films and programmes have a negative impact on local culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Sample Response

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Some people are concerned about the widespreadpervasive influence of foreign films and programmes on local cultures, and theylocal cultures and they firmly believe that foreign programmes and filmscinemas are harmful to local culturedetrimental to their local culture. This essay supports the viewaligns with the perspective that foreign media has a negative impact on local culture, posing challenges to the preservation of indigenous traditions and values.

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Foreign media often promotes cultural homogenization and erodes distinctive features of local culturesunique aspects of local cultures. The dominance of foreign content may overshadow local productions, leading to a erosionloss of cultural identity. For example, the overwhelming presence of Hollywood movies in cinemas worldwide often overshadows indigenous films, contributing to the marginalization of local storytelling and cultural expressions. Those Hollywood movies are often popular among local audiences who, over time, ignore locally made movies creating a hindrance to promoting local culture.

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Furthermore, the portrayal of foreign cultures in media can perpetuate stereotypes and misconceptions about local traditions. Foreign films often depict cultures in a simplified or distorted manner, fostering misunderstandings and misrepresentations. For instance, the portrayal of certain cultures stereotypicallycultures in a stereotypical manner may reinforce biased perceptionsperspectives, affecting how local populations are perceived both domestically and globally. This creates a false impression among audiencesamong the audiences, especially younger viewersyoung ones, who start favouring distorted portrayals of other culturesfalse culture while neglecting their own traditionstradition.

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In conclusion, the influence of foreign films and programmes on local culture can have harmfuldetrimental consequences, jeopardizing the preservation of indigenous traditions and values. The dominance of foreign media may lead to cultural erosion, marginalization of local productions, and the perpetuation of stereotypes. It is crucial to acknowledge the potential negative impact of foreign media and strive to preserve local cultures.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 7.0

The response maintains a clear position and supports it with a well-organised discussion of cultural marginalisation and stereotyping, using a suitably formal range of language. The weaker point is that the second argument remains somewhat abstract and its connection to damage within the local culture is not always fully explained. The highest-priority improvement is to make each example more specific and show its causal relevance to the stated position.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

7.0
Scoring rule

A clear agreement position is sustained and supported by two relevant arguments, though the second is less fully substantiated.

Next step

Explain precisely how distorted foreign portrayals change local behaviour or values, using a concrete and credible example.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

7.0
Scoring rule

Ideas are logically sequenced in focused paragraphs, with clear progression from the position to supporting reasons and conclusion.

Next step

Reduce repeated wording around foreign media and local culture by using more varied referencing across adjacent sentences.

LR

Lexical Resource

7.0
Scoring rule

The vocabulary is varied and appropriately academic, with occasional awkward or imprecise choices.

Next step

Refine combinations such as ‘foreign programmes and cinemas’ and ‘false culture’ into more natural, exact expressions.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

7.0
Scoring rule

Complex structures are used with good control, while a few article, punctuation, and agreement slips remain.

Next step

Check long sentences for missing commas and refine number and article choices such as ‘among audiences’ and ‘their own traditions’.

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IELTS Writing Task 2

Some people think that foreign films and programmes have a negative impact on local culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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