Many people prefer to watch foreign films than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?
Sample Response
In many countries, especially in developing countries, foreign movies are more popular than the locally made films. There are several reasons for this trend and the government can and should greatly contribute to promoting domestic movies for the overall progress of the industry. The main reason people prefer movies from other countries is the quality of the movie. It is often noticed that locally made films in many countries lack better plots and the characters do not have the necessary depth to touch the hearts of the audiences. Moreover, foreign films have a great variation and they are more enjoyable than the domestic films. This happens because large film industries like the Hollywood can allocate a huge budget and have talented producers and directors while films made in developing countries have a small amount to spend on a movie and do not have many talented movie makers. For instance, the type of animated movies and special effects developing countries produce these days are unimaginable in most of the developing countries and this is why movie lovers from these countries prefer to watch movies made in other countries. The poor quality of acting and low-budget filmmaking in most of the developing countries discourage the audiences to enjoy local films. In my opinion, the government should support the film industry in order to support this industry, encourage people to enjoy more domestically produced films and gain international acclimation for quality movies. Each country has some talented producers, actors and filmmakers who for the lack of financial and political support cannot bring out the best. They should be given a chance to prove themselves. No doubt big budget is required to make better quality films and the government should provide subsidiary to help local film industry progress. Government’s help for the movie industry would bring more audiences to the theatre to enjoy those films and earn more ticket money. Moreover, quality films would compete in international stages and bring fame for the country. In conclusion, the film industry in each country should be supported by the government as it would make local films popular and earn money and fame for the country.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Remove unnecessary article Original: the locally made films Suggested revision: locally made films Why it matters: The definite article is unnecessary when referring to locally made films in general.
- 2. Use precise phrasing Original: greatly contribute to promoting domestic movies for the overall progress of the industry Suggested revision: contribute significantly to the development of the domestic film industry Why it matters: This phrasing expresses the intended contribution more precisely and avoids the vague word 'progress'.
- 3. Use consistent reference Original: movie Suggested revision: films Why it matters: The plural noun fits the general comparison between foreign and domestic films.
- 4. Correct word choice Original: better Suggested revision: strong Why it matters: 'Better' requires an explicit comparison, whereas 'strong' directly describes plot quality.
- 5. Remove unnecessary article Original: hearts of the audiences Suggested revision: hearts of audiences Why it matters: The plural noun refers to audiences generally and does not need the definite article.
- 6. Use correct noun Original: a great variation Suggested revision: great variety Why it matters: 'Variety' is the natural noun for a broad range of films.
- 7. Remove unnecessary article Original: the domestic films Suggested revision: domestic films Why it matters: The comparison refers to domestic films in general, so the definite article is unnecessary.
- 8. Remove article Original: the Hollywood Suggested revision: Hollywood Why it matters: The proper name 'Hollywood' is normally used without an article.
- 9. Match plural context Original: allocate a huge budget Suggested revision: allocate huge budgets Why it matters: The plural noun agrees with the general reference to large film industries and multiple productions.
- 10. Use concise wording Original: have a small amount to spend on a movie Suggested revision: have limited budgets for each film Why it matters: This revision conveys the financial limitation more naturally and concisely.
- 11. Use precise term Original: movie makers Suggested revision: filmmakers Why it matters: 'Filmmakers' is the standard concise term in this context.
- 12. Correct number agreement Original: the type of animated movies and special effects Suggested revision: the types of animated films and special effects Why it matters: The plural noun 'types' agrees with the two kinds of production being discussed.
Suggested Rewrites
- the locally made films locally made films
- greatly contribute to promoting domestic movies for the overall progress of the industry contribute significantly to the development of the domestic film industry
- movie films
- better strong
- hearts of the audiences hearts of audiences
- a great variation great variety
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response gives a clear position and relevant explanations for both foreign-film preference and government support, with ideas that progress logically. Its main limitation is recurring imprecision in vocabulary and grammar, alongside some repetition and a confusing example about animation and special effects. The highest-priority improvement is to express each supporting point with more precise collocations and a clearly accurate example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both questions are directly answered with a clear position and generally developed reasons concerning production quality, funding, and national benefits.
Strengthen the explanation of audience preference with one unambiguous, specific example and avoid repeating the same funding rationale.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically from causes to government action, with clear overall paragraphing despite some repetition within the body sections.
Use sharper topic sentences and remove repeated statements about low budgets and government support to make progression more economical.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a sufficiently broad topic vocabulary, but several inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce precision.
Correct combinations such as gain international acclaim, provide subsidies, and discourage audiences from watching to improve lexical control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures communicates meaning clearly, although article, agreement, and sentence-construction errors recur.
Proofread subject-verb agreement, articles, and complex comparison sentences so that longer structures remain consistently accurate.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people prefer to watch foreign films than locally produced films. Why could this be? Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?
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