The best way to solve world’s environmental problem is increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree and give your own opinion?
Sample Response
It is believed that traffic and pollution issues would be best tackled by increasing the price of fuelinflating the price of petroleum. In my opinion, this idea is completely flawed and there are several reasonable alternatives.
Clearly, the priceClearly the price of fuel has little to do with pressing problems of traffic and pollution. The inevitable demand for time efficiencyefficience and safe commuting in the modern world makes changes in fuel prices seem relatively insignificantmakes the change of fuel prices become rather insignificant, which suggestsproves the ineffectiveness of the suggested policy. In other words, even if the price were increased, people would still travel by their preferred form of transport on a daily basis and the problems of traffic and pollution would remain. Additionally, this solution could easily trigger public opposition and resentmentsocial disagreement and resentment. This, coupled with the reluctance to usereluctance of using expensive fuel to travel every day, could be counter-productive and the proposed policy could prove ineffectivethis proposed idea would become irrelevant.
On the other hand, alternatives to increasing the price of petrol are more effectiveshow greater effectiveness. Firstly, governments could implement certain regulations restricting the use of private vehicles such as cars and encourage people to use public transportationturn people to using public transportation. This would relieve heavy traffic congestion on many roadsrelieve many roads from heavy traffic congestion by reducing the number of vehicles on the road, which in turn alleviates the problem of pollution caused by exhaust emissions. Secondly, in many cities around the world, cycling has proved to be an effective, environmentally friendly mode of transportform of alternative transport and should be encouraged in more major citiesshould be encouraged more in other major cities. Certain infrastructure, such as separate zones for cyclists, should be created to help reduce traffic congestionavoid the overload of traffic during rush hour when the number of vehicles can exceed the road’s capacity.
In conclusion, I believe that raisingheightening the price of fuel used for travelling to address traffic and pollution problems is somewhat absurd andabsurd; and that there areis a number of other more suitable and effective solutions.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear position and offers logically developed alternatives, with effective paragraphing and generally strong control of complex sentences. Its main limitation is imprecise wording and several awkward collocations, while parts of the argument against higher fuel prices remain asserted rather than fully demonstrated. The highest-priority improvement is to sharpen the causal reasoning and use more natural, exact phrasing throughout.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear disagreement is maintained and supported with relevant discussion of the proposed policy and viable alternatives.
Develop the causal case against higher fuel prices more convincingly instead of assuming that travel behaviour would remain unchanged.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through a clear introduction, two focused body paragraphs, and a consistent conclusion.
Strengthen the internal flow of the first body paragraph by making the relationship between resentment, travel choices, and policy effectiveness explicit.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a broad topic-specific vocabulary, but several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise.
Replace awkward phrases such as references to heightening prices or relieving roads with precise, idiomatic alternatives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A varied range of complex structures is used successfully, and errors rarely interfere with meaning.
Improve control of agreement, complementation, and sentence construction in phrases involving a number of solutions and reluctance to use fuel.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
The best way to solve world’s environmental problem is increase the cost of fuel. Do you agree or disagree and give your own opinion?
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