In the last 20 years, there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example, the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future. To what extent do you agree with this view?
Sample Response
Nowadays, the development of information technologythe advancement of Information Technology, specifically the internet, hasspecifically the internet has transformed the face of our civilization. Albeit, the internet has several drawbacks, I disagree that it outweighs the advantages. It is true that the internet can bring some negative effects on human behaviournegative influences toward human behaviour, such as consumerism and social isolationconsumerism and autistic manner, to name a few. Consumerism, for example, is caused by the rapid growth of e-commerce, online advertising, and internet accessibility. Because of these developmentsBecause of these, people findfound it easy to makedo transactions. They prefer to buy things online rather than goingother than making an effort to go to a local retail shoptheir nearest local retail shop. On the other hand, such conditions, especially internet accessibility, which is compounded bywhich compounded by widespread useusage of mobile gadgets, has led to social isolation among internet usershad induced autistic manner among internet user. Here, this means thatAutistic here, means, that people tend to be less active and isolated at the same time because they can easily do things with the internet by using handheld devicesby only having gadgets in their hand or sitting in front of the computer. However, information technology has also benefited societyinformation technology has also done justice to mankind. Firstly, it helped bringbrings people together despite national boundariesdespite country boundary and remoteness. Secondly, due to the internet, people can bridge communication gapsthe gap of communication's distance easily and rapidly. Examples includeSome examples for these are the usage of instant messenger, email, and online meeting applicationsapplication. Finally, since the internet has helped overcome geographical barrierssince internet helped eliminate territorial's gap, any world citizen can now easily spread their movement to the global citizen. In conclusion, although Information Technology, particularly internet, has several negative impacts, in my opinion, it has more advantages to offer to our future generations.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The essay directly rejects the prediction and attempts to weigh disadvantages such as consumerism and isolation against the communication benefits of the internet. Its main limitation is that several claims are expressed imprecisely or remain underdeveloped, and recurring grammatical errors sometimes obscure the intended reasoning. The highest-priority improvement is to replace inaccurate labels with precise descriptions and develop one concrete future benefit and drawback in well-controlled paragraphs.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear position is maintained and both negative and positive effects are considered, but several ideas are only partly explained and the future focus is limited.
Develop one likely future disadvantage and one future benefit with clear causal reasoning before comparing their significance.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument moves from disadvantages to advantages and a conclusion, but the single paragraph, abrupt transitions, and unclear referencing weaken progression.
Separate the two sides into body paragraphs and ensure each example explicitly supports the preceding claim.
Lexical Resource
The essay attempts topic-specific vocabulary, but frequent inaccurate combinations and the misuse of “autistic” for social isolation substantially reduce precision.
Use neutral, exact terms such as social isolation, online accessibility, cross-border communication, and global audiences.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of structures is attempted, but agreement, tense, articles, clause formation, and possessives are frequently inaccurate while meaning is usually recoverable.
Proofread each complex sentence for a complete main clause and correct patterns such as “has helped bring,” “among internet users,” and “the internet.”
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In the last 20 years, there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example, the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future. To what extent do you agree with this view?
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