Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment but population and education as well. what problems will your country face in the next ten years? how can these problems be overcome?
Sample Response
As economies develop and the world’s population grows, countries worldwidethe countries of the world have to tackle new and complexcomplicated issues. Overover the next ten years, Australia will have to deal with three critical problems: the environment, transport infrastructure and access to higher education.
Water, air, and land are all affected by pollution, whether it is caused by human waste or chemicals in the emissions and effluents from factories and vehicles. over-watering because of extensive irrigation and the use of chemical fertilizers on farms is also degrading our land. Overcrowdingovercrowding and poor design of indoor and public spacesinternal and public space lead to significant levels of noise pollution. Everyoneeveryone wants cleaner water and air, and we certainly need quality land and soil to grow the food we need.
As cities grow and become more crowded so we need to travel further to work and then home again. Transport quality and standardsquality and standards are being raised all the time, with faster and safer freeways and transport systems, and more comfortable travel with airconditioning and bettersofter seating.
Education and training are becoming more critically important. Itit is expected that an increasing number of highly educated and trained workersincreasing numbers of highly educated and trained recruits will be needed in the workforce. Companiescompanies are looking to employ applicants with postgraduate qualifications, so undergraduate degrees are no longer sufficientso no longer are undergraduate degrees sufficient.
The cost of providing and maintaining a healthy environmenthealthy environments, transport, and higherextended education is enormous. Thethe government is now imposing a levy on people who use our natural resources, finingfinding factories which pollute rivers and the atmosphere, and raising transport fares. Education isfares.education is also becoming more expensive.
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response identifies several relevant future challenges and uses a clear paragraph structure with some strong environmental detail. However, the proposed solutions are brief, unclear, and sometimes counterproductive, while the transport and education problems are not fully explained. The priority is to pair each precisely defined problem with a practical, developed solution and explain how that measure would address it.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Relevant problems are identified, but coverage is uneven and the required solutions are largely undeveloped or unclear.
Develop one specific solution for each major problem and explain the direct result it would produce.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response is organised by topic and generally easy to follow, although progression toward the solutions is weak.
Use a problem-and-solution structure that explicitly connects every proposed measure to the preceding challenge.
Lexical Resource
The response shows a reasonably varied topic vocabulary, but awkward choices and spelling errors reduce precision.
Check word choice and compounds carefully, especially finding versus fining, air conditioning, and extended education.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
There is a useful range of sentence forms, but recurring capitalization and punctuation errors weaken overall control.
Correct sentence-initial capitals, spacing after full stops, and faulty structures such as As cities grow... so we need.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Countries around the world will be facing significant challenges relating not only to the environment but population and education as well. what problems will your country face in the next ten years? how can these problems be overcome?
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