With an increasing population communicating via the Internet and text messaging, face-to-face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
The use of the Internet and smartphones has become a global phenomenon, and we depend on these technological marvels in one way or another. While some people assert that the widespread use of Internet communication and mobile phones will replace the traditional form of face-to-face interaction, I completely disagree with this view.
To begin with, the use of the internet and other latest communication technologies drive us to meet new people and contact dear ones who stay far away. This can especially be true when one gets a chance to express his or her feelings via a text or phone call. To quote an example, Skype and Facebook have enabled people living in far-flung areas to communicate effectively through video chats, thereby enabling us to contact more frequently with people we care about. This has not replaced the way we care for and meet others, rather it has made it more convenient and frequent.
While the advancement of technology might scale back personal contact to some extent for the short term, it, in fact, enables people to become more polarised towards seeing siblings, parents and mates in the long run. This can be easily visualised by taking into account that if we are to sustain the Internet as a tool to deliver our emotions and beliefs to the world, we will need to picture-proof gatherings, celebrations and events thereby obviating the need for face-to-face communication.
Secondly, the human is a social beings, and it is to the credit of this physical presence that we as a species are able to harness long-term relationships, so its value cannot be undermined. Mere endorsing words of good character by texts cannot inculcate the right kind of virtue, thereby further laying emphasis on human presence for the future is required.
To conclude, it is clearly evident that the internet and text messaging will not make face-to-face communication a footnote of the past, but rather make us want to make more relationships and get in touch with them as well as our family and relatives.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Capitalise Internet consistently Original: The use of the Internet Suggested revision: the use of the Internet Why it matters: Capitalising ‘Internet’ here matches its treatment elsewhere in the response.
- 2. Correct technology modifier Original: other latest communication technologies Suggested revision: other modern communication technologies Why it matters: ‘Other latest’ is not a natural modifier combination in English.
- 3. Fix subject-verb agreement Original: drive us Suggested revision: drives us Why it matters: The head of the subject is the singular noun ‘use’.
- 4. Use natural relationship phrase Original: dear ones who stay far away Suggested revision: loved ones who live far away Why it matters: ‘Loved ones’ and ‘live far away’ are the idiomatic expressions in this context.
- 5. Correct linking clause Original: This can especially be true Suggested revision: This is especially true Why it matters: The statement describes an actual situation rather than a possibility requiring ‘can’.
- 6. Use natural medium phrase Original: via a text Suggested revision: by text Why it matters: ‘By text’ is the concise conventional expression for this communication channel.
- 7. Correct contact word order Original: enabling us to contact more frequently with people Suggested revision: allowing us to contact people more frequently Why it matters: ‘Contact’ takes a direct object without ‘with’, and the frequency adverb follows that object naturally.
- 8. Fix comma splice Original: others, rather Suggested revision: others; rather, Why it matters: A semicolon separates the independent clauses, and ‘rather’ is followed by a comma.
- 9. Clarify contact reference Original: made it more convenient and frequent Suggested revision: made such contact more convenient and frequent Why it matters: Naming ‘contact’ removes the unclear pronoun reference.
- 10. Correct time preposition Original: for the short term Suggested revision: in the short term Why it matters: ‘In the short term’ is the fixed expression for this period.
- 11. Use natural inclination phrase Original: polarised towards seeing Suggested revision: inclined to see Why it matters: ‘Polarised towards’ does not express a greater desire to meet people.
- 12. Correct noun agreement Original: the human is a social beings Suggested revision: human beings are social Why it matters: The original mixes a singular determiner and verb with a plural noun.
Suggested Rewrites
- The use of the Internet the use of the Internet
- other latest communication technologies other modern communication technologies
- drive us drives us
- dear ones who stay far away loved ones who live far away
- This can especially be true This is especially true
- via a text by text
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear disagreement and offers relevant ideas about technology supporting distant relationships and the enduring value of physical presence. However, several explanations become unclear or internally inconsistent, especially the claim involving ‘picture-proof’ gatherings and removing the need for face-to-face contact, while frequent collocation and grammar errors reduce precision. Prioritise one logically consistent reason per paragraph and express it in simpler, controlled language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Response
A clear position is maintained and relevant reasons are presented, but some support is insufficiently explained or contradicts the stated disagreement.
Replace the unclear gathering argument with a direct explanation of why online contact encourages rather than replaces later in-person meetings.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing provides a visible progression, though internal links and referents sometimes obscure the relationship between claims and conclusions.
Build each body paragraph around one topic sentence followed by one explanation and one clearly connected example.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a broad vocabulary range, but frequent miscollocations and inaccurate choices such as ‘polarised towards seeing’ and ‘picture-proof’ impair clarity.
Choose familiar, precise phrases such as ‘more inclined to meet’ and avoid uncommon words unless their meaning and collocation are certain.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Both simple and complex structures are attempted, but agreement, clause joining, and sentence-construction errors are frequent and sometimes impede meaning.
Prioritise accurate subject-verb agreement and complete clause structures before adding complex participle phrases or multiple subordinate ideas.
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