In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
After some years, people will not anymore face the need of buying books, printed newspapers or magazines, because the online network will be so developed that they could freely be able to read and gather all of the information needed online without paying a penny. I fully agree that in the near future the paper resource of information which is currently the main one, will be replaced by the easier and more convenient online method. Firstly, printed newspapers and books are no longer up-to-date, nowadays. Due to Corona virus, people have been obliged to stay particularly at their homes, which has led to times more people consuming information from online news, rather than from the traditional paper resources. What’s more is that everyone is aware that the information on the internet is more efficient, as well as better represented and organised. For example, you can find whatever you want on the net just with one click of your mouse and it doesn’t depend on which sphere of life your search concerns. Whilst if your newspaper is about horse riding, but you want to check the newest models of cars on the global market, it’s impossible to do so and then you have to buy another newspaper about cars, meaning few dollars more. Secondly, the present’s trend in recycling and acting in a more eco-friendly way will for sure reduce the producing of paper, including both books and newspapers, which, on the other hand, will increase their online version demand. For this reason every kind of paper-delivered information will be replaced by information delivered online through our computers and telephones. For instance, one step further of the eco-friendly people’s mind could be the usage of online students books saved in pdf format, instead of the commonly spread paper books. Not only this, but the fact that almost every school this year is working online, with students attending all of their classes through the network, gives us a clear need for more online information than the paper-delivered. In, I think that if we take the time machine and go into the far future, we shouldn’t be surprised if we see people using the internet as the only source of information, without any kind of need for buying newspapapers which cost money.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use future expression Original: After some years Suggested revision: In the future Why it matters: The replacement is the natural expression for an unspecified future time.
- 2. Correct negative structure Original: will not anymore face the need of buying Suggested revision: will no longer need to buy Why it matters: The revision corrects adverb placement and the verb-complement pattern.
- 3. Remove modal redundancy Original: could freely be able to read Suggested revision: will be able to read freely Why it matters: Could and be able to duplicate modality, while will matches the stated future prediction.
- 4. Remove contradictory timing Original: no longer up-to-date, nowadays Suggested revision: no longer up to date Why it matters: Nowadays is redundant with no longer, and the predicative phrase does not need hyphens.
- 5. Use natural phrase Original: particularly at their homes Suggested revision: at home Why it matters: At home is the idiomatic expression and particularly is misplaced here.
- 6. Complete quantity phrase Original: times Suggested revision: many Why it matters: Times requires a stated multiplier, so many is needed for an unspecified increase.
- 7. Use concise transition Original: What’s more is that Suggested revision: Moreover, Why it matters: The transition links the additional point more concisely.
- 8. Clarify what is efficient Original: the information on the internet is more efficient Suggested revision: information on the internet can be accessed more efficiently Why it matters: Efficiency describes the process of accessing information rather than the information itself.
- 9. Choose precise verb Original: represented Suggested revision: presented Why it matters: Presented is the natural verb for describing how information is displayed or organised.
- 10. Clarify clause structure Original: it doesn’t depend on which sphere of life your search concerns Suggested revision: this is true regardless of the subject of your search Why it matters: The revision expresses the unrestricted condition with a clear grammatical structure.
- 11. Correct noun phrase Original: present’s Suggested revision: current Why it matters: Present does not take a possessive form to modify trend in this meaning.
- 12. Use formal collocation Original: will for sure reduce the producing of paper Suggested revision: will certainly reduce paper production Why it matters: The revised phrase uses the correct noun form and a more formal adverb.
Suggested Rewrites
- After some years In the future
- will not anymore face the need of buying will no longer need to buy
- could freely be able to read will be able to read freely
- no longer up-to-date, nowadays no longer up to date
- particularly at their homes at home
- times many
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear position and offers relevant reasons involving convenience, cost, environmental concerns, and online education. Its main limitation is that frequent awkward collocations and grammatical errors reduce precision, while the claim that all desired material will be free receives limited scrutiny. The highest-priority improvement is to develop that central claim directly and express each supporting point in shorter, more accurately controlled sentences.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A consistent opinion is supported with several relevant reasons and examples, although some claims are overgeneralised and the issue of universally free access is insufficiently examined.
Address the payment claim directly by considering subscriptions, copyright, and whether convenience alone means printed material will disappear completely.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a recognisable introduction, two main lines of argument, and a conclusion, with clear overall progression despite mechanical linking and absent paragraph breaks.
Separate the main ideas into paragraphs and replace long, loosely connected sentences with clearer chains of claim, explanation, and example.
Lexical Resource
There is adequate vocabulary for discussing media, technology, education, and environmental issues, but frequent unnatural collocations reduce precision.
Use natural combinations such as “printed sources,” “paper production,” and “demand for online versions,” and check word forms and spelling carefully.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied complex structures, but errors in articles, prepositions, agreement, punctuation, and clause construction occur frequently while meaning remains generally clear.
Prioritise accurate clause boundaries and verb patterns, then proofread each sentence for articles, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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