The spread of a ‘global language’ such as English will threaten national languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
The rise of global languages has been substantially increasing in many parts of the world. A certain number of people consider such expansion to be precarious to the native languages. However, a considerable school of thought bolsters the increase in the usages of it. I agree with the latter notion and feel that the preponderance of such languages is indeed for good.
The very reason for the advent of global languages was the unification of the cord of different ideas encoded in various languages. Earlier, it was difficult for the standpoints at times for a particular geographical terrain with a certain vernacular connotation to be deciphered by others. Especially, during foreign visits. The very fact that languages like English have been soaring high across the globe strengthens the efficacy of international linguistics. For the tourism sector, it has proved to be a bonanza wherein the earlier times, foreigners warded off the idea to travel to a new place just because of a language problem. It has now been completely allayed. The economy, therefore, in the tourism industry has been ballooning.
For international businesses and ventures, usage of such languages has been very lucrative ever since the times they were used for multiple reasons as in terms of communication abstinence and the need for a third medium or translator to decipher the entire process as the speakers of international languages earlier were not many. In terms of the amicability of the relationship among nations, such languages have been a primary root cause. The foreign investments upon the fluorescence of global language acceptance have only seen mammoth and gigantic increments.
Some might contradict the usage of global languages as it could be an impediment to the existence and heritage of native languages. But it could be very effectively negated by conserving and promulgating the native vernacular medium of language. After all, the exponential inception of an international language in no way means the diminution of indigenous culture.
Conclusively it could be stated that international languages should be emboldened and duly accepted.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use natural aspect Original: has been substantially increasing Suggested revision: has increased substantially Why it matters: The present perfect simple is the natural form for describing this change over time.
- 2. Correct the collocation Original: precarious to the native languages Suggested revision: a threat to native languages Why it matters: “Precarious to” does not express the intended idea of posing a threat.
- 3. Choose the precise noun Original: preponderance Suggested revision: prevalence Why it matters: “Prevalence” accurately refers to languages becoming widespread.
- 4. Clarify the benefit Original: indeed for good Suggested revision: generally beneficial Why it matters: “For good” usually means permanently and does not clearly convey a positive effect here.
- 5. Remove the mixed metaphor Original: unification of the cord of different ideas Suggested revision: unification of different ideas Why it matters: “The cord of ideas” is an unclear and unnatural metaphor in this context.
- 6. Use an academic verb Original: have been soaring high Suggested revision: have spread rapidly Why it matters: “Spread rapidly” describes the growing use of languages more precisely.
- 7. Express the intended meaning Original: efficacy of international linguistics Suggested revision: effectiveness of international communication Why it matters: “International linguistics” refers to a field of study rather than communication between people.
- 8. Correct the connector Original: wherein the earlier times Suggested revision: whereas in earlier times Why it matters: “Whereas” correctly introduces the contrast with the present situation.
- 9. Fix the verb phrase Original: warded off the idea Suggested revision: rejected the idea Why it matters: “Ward off” is used for preventing a threat, not for deciding against travel.
- 10. Clarify the subject Original: economy, therefore, in the tourism industry Suggested revision: tourism industry, therefore, Why it matters: This revision makes the tourism industry the clear subject of the sentence.
- 11. Use formal wording Original: has been ballooning Suggested revision: has grown Why it matters: “Has grown” conveys the increase in a more appropriate academic register.
- 12. Remove redundancy Original: a primary root cause Suggested revision: a primary cause Why it matters: “Root” and “cause” duplicate the same meaning in this phrase.
Suggested Rewrites
- has been substantially increasing has increased substantially
- precarious to the native languages a threat to native languages
- preponderance prevalence
- indeed for good generally beneficial
- unification of the cord of different ideas unification of different ideas
- have been soaring high have spread rapidly
Why this response received Band 6.0
The response maintains a clear position and offers several relevant benefits of a global language, with a recognisable progression from tourism to business and cultural concerns. Its main limitation is that much of the argument promotes international languages without directly explaining why national languages would remain secure, while frequent strained wording obscures some ideas. Prioritise a fuller, concrete rebuttal of the stated threat using precise, natural language.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear disagreement is maintained, but the benefits discussed only partly address the specific claim that national languages are threatened.
Develop the cultural counterargument with a concrete explanation of how national languages can coexist with a global language.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a logical paragraph sequence, although some internal connections are unclear and several short statements interrupt the flow.
Use clearer topic sentences and link each example explicitly to the paragraph's main claim.
Lexical Resource
There is a broad vocabulary range, but frequent unnatural collocations and imprecise word choices reduce clarity.
Prefer accurate, familiar combinations such as cross-border communication and language preservation over elaborate but unsuitable expressions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex forms is attempted, and meaning remains mostly accessible despite recurring fragments and awkward clause structures.
Check sentence boundaries and simplify overloaded sentences so that each clause has a clear grammatical relationship.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
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