Differences between countries become less evident each year. Nowadays, all over the world people share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits and TV channels.既定事实 Is this a positive or negative development?

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It is obvious that globalizationthe globalization is unstoppable leading to the elimination ofwhich leads to eliminate the differences between countriesdiscrepancy in countries. For example, people from different countries share the same fashions, advertising, brands, eating habits and TV channels. In my opinion, it is largelystrongly negative for our society. And I will explain reasons in the next.

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Innovation is the primary driving forcefirst motivation of development. Ifdevelopment, If the identical products become more and more prevalent, that means people’s enthusiasm for innovation would drop. As a result, theredrop.There will be more and more individuals that are less inclined to pursue original innovationlazy and idle and do not focus on invention and creation.The whole society and the development will not advancewill not get advanced in that way.

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The world is wonderful because it possessesjust as owning diversity and richness.It will be such a tedious world that is full of the same thingssame stuffs.For instance, a large number of people who travel around the world feel disappointed about the present tourist attractions. Because the majority of present tourist attractions could not appeal to touristsappeal tourists that lose local characteristics.Tourists would not pay for it, whichthat would deal a blow tocause difficulties to local tourism.

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Furthermore,cultural globalization can weaken national culture and traditions, or eventraditions , even threaten national identity.大量外来影视、流行文化在全球传播,很多年轻人更追捧海外的节日、潮流和审美,对本土传统节日、民俗习俗兴趣变淡。比如不少年轻人热衷过一些海外节日,却对本国传统节庆的习俗、内涵了解不多。久而久之,本土文化的传承缺少年轻人参与,民族文化的辨识度慢慢下降。

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In conclusion,I think globalization is a sign of progress in a society that people are no longer restrictedno longer are restricted to brands and advertisements from their own society but are able to access more international goods.But the downsides areis far outweigh themore outweighed than positive impacts.

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Why this response received Band 5.0

文章明确表达了全球化导致同质化的负面立场,但未达到最低字数要求且正文中包含未翻译的中文段落。最大的优势在于文章结构框架完整且立场清晰;主要局限是混用中文草稿严重影响了语言表达的完整性;当务之急是用英文重新表达并拓展未完成的论据,确保全篇使用规范英语。

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

任务回应

5.0
Scoring rule

文章给出了明确的负面立场并提供了多个切题的切入点,但因未达到字数要求及主体段包含中文草稿,导致论证展开不够充分。

Next step

将未完成的中文段落用英文完整展开,补充具体细节以确保字数达到250字以上。

CC

连贯与衔接

5.0
Scoring rule

文章具备基本的分段和逻辑衔接词,但中文段落的混入破坏了整体文章的连贯性与阅读流畅度。

Next step

替换未翻译内容并使用恰当的逻辑连接词(如'In addition'或'Consequently')增强段落间的自然过渡。

LR

词汇资源

4.0
Scoring rule

词汇量较为局限且出现多处词汇误用,正文中直接插入中文严重影响了词汇项的得分。

Next step

积累并准确使用与文化同质化相关的英文话题词汇(如'cultural homogenization'、'loss of identity'),避免拼写和语用错误。

GRA

语法多样性与准确性

5.0
Scoring rule

句式结构较为单一,存在较多基础语法错误(如主谓一致、介词搭配及被动语态误用),但基础句意尚可理解。

Next step

加强对复杂句式(如定语从句和状语从句)的控制力,并在完成写作后检查主谓一致与动词搭配。