Some people believe that the good leaders are born, whereas others hold the opinion that the leadership qualities could be obtained during the life. Who represents the good leader qualities indeed?
Sample Response
It is often stated that some people are born to be a leader. However, many people assume that a good leader may achieve leadership skill due to social interaction. Personally, I reckon to the second statement that to be a leader means to have the ability to understand some needs of the public and having proper behaviour and the leadership quality is achieved rather than to born with.
To begin with, the leadership qualities may trigger when there are crisis or opportunities in a community or a particular place which allows individuals to step forward and take some responsibilities. These characteristics occur to respond the social requests for overcoming some obstacles in that place. For example, when there is an election in a region, some individuals can register to be a leader, however, the only way to ensure the real figure is by giving matters to solve which may prove their leadership ability. Therefore, people who gain some input from society may have better qualities than people who have less interaction ability.
Furthermore, it is believed that person in charge should respect one another. It means that they could manage and embrace people from various types. At the same time, the leader should treat others equally regardless their background and social status. Treating people equally might seem challenging in term of social satisfaction. However, if a leader can solve this issue, they will be known as a real leader.
Some people are born with leadership quality as per many people’s opinion. But I believe that leadership is a quality which is related to someone’s personality, social influence, motivation and ambition. It is not unusual that we have so many great leaders in our history who simply responded to the need of time and stepped forward to help others. Leadership is a quality we must learn and feel passionate about.
In conclusion, some qualities of leadership could not be achieved as a gift or destiny, yet it takes time and effort. Being friendly to society may become indispensable aspect to reach that goal since this opportunity provides people to engage deeply.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Match plural subject Original: born to be a leader Suggested revision: born to be leaders Why it matters: The plural subject “some people” requires the plural complement “leaders.”
- 2. Use acquire collocation Original: achieve leadership skill Suggested revision: acquire leadership skills Why it matters: People acquire skills rather than achieve them, and the general noun should be plural.
- 3. Show means clearly Original: due to social interaction Suggested revision: through social interaction Why it matters: “Through” more clearly identifies interaction as the means of developing skills.
- 4. State agreement naturally Original: I reckon to the second statement Suggested revision: I agree with the second view Why it matters: “Reckon to a statement” is not a valid English collocation.
- 5. Use concise possessive Original: some needs of the public Suggested revision: the public’s needs Why it matters: The possessive form states the relationship more directly.
- 6. Restore verb parallelism Original: and having proper behaviour Suggested revision: and to behave appropriately Why it matters: The coordinated phrase must match the preceding infinitive “to understand.”
- 7. Fix number and verb Original: the leadership quality is achieved Suggested revision: leadership qualities are acquired Why it matters: The general reference is plural, and qualities are acquired rather than achieved.
- 8. Correct comparison ending Original: rather than to born with Suggested revision: rather than innate Why it matters: The replacement supplies a grammatical complement to “are acquired.”
- 9. Use emergence verb Original: may trigger Suggested revision: may emerge Why it matters: Qualities may “emerge,” whereas “trigger” normally requires an object.
- 10. Use plural crises Original: there are crisis or opportunities Suggested revision: there are crises or opportunities Why it matters: The plural construction requires the irregular plural “crises.”
- 11. Match plural antecedent Original: which allows individuals Suggested revision: that allow individuals Why it matters: The relative verb must agree with the plural “crises or opportunities.”
- 12. Use responsibility collocation Original: take some responsibilities Suggested revision: take on responsibilities Why it matters: The standard collocation is “take on responsibilities.”
Suggested Rewrites
- born to be a leader born to be leaders
- achieve leadership skill acquire leadership skills
- due to social interaction through social interaction
- I reckon to the second statement I agree with the second view
- some needs of the public the public’s needs
- and having proper behaviour and to behave appropriately
Why this response received Band 6.0
The essay presents a clear learned-leadership position and identifies relevant qualities such as responsibility, social understanding, fairness, and responsiveness to community needs. Its main limitation is that several ideas and examples remain vague, while frequent grammatical and collocational errors make passages about elections and social interaction difficult to interpret. Prioritise defining two or three leadership qualities precisely and supporting each with a specific, clearly explained example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
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Task Response
The response takes a discernible position that leadership is developed and discusses several relevant qualities, but its supporting examples are vague and only partly explained.
Choose two precise qualities and show through a named or concrete example how experience develops each one.
Coherence and Cohesion
The five-paragraph structure provides broad progression, but vague references such as 'these characteristics', 'that place', and 'this opportunity' weaken connections between ideas.
Begin each body paragraph with one explicit leadership quality and ensure every following sentence explains or illustrates that same quality.
Lexical Resource
There is an adequate attempt at topic-specific vocabulary, but frequent unnatural combinations such as 'qualities may trigger' and 'gain some input from society' reduce clarity.
Use direct combinations such as 'leadership qualities emerge', 'respond to community needs', and 'gain experience through social interaction'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The essay attempts varied structures, but frequent errors in articles, agreement, verb patterns, and clause construction sometimes make meaning difficult to recover.
Practise complete clause patterns, correcting forms such as 'qualities are acquired', 'when there is a crisis', and 'regardless of their background'.
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