Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Sample Response
Some people believe that a government should provide free education and health care to its residents. To a certain extentpoint, I would agree with the idea, but I also believe that citizens should take some responsibility for their children's education and their family's healthcaretheir children's education and treatment for the family. There are several reasons why many people believeFor several reasons, many people believe that education and healthcare should be funded by the government and offered to citizensoffered to the citizens free of chargewithout any cost. To begin with, most people fulfil their tax obligations, and they should receive benefitsget some benefits from the government in the form of free medication and education for their children. It is a fact that education is an essential to the developmentessential factor for the development of a country. By providing free education to the residents, it is hopedresidents it is hoped that more skilled and educated workers would be trainedcreated for the country. These futurepotential workers will definitely boost the country's economy in the future. So free education should be treated as an investment by the governmentauthority. One of the reasons to oppose the idea is that free healthcarefree medical service makes some people irresponsible about their healthirresponsible of their health condition. It is believed that expensive health care would force people to adopt a healthy lifestylefollow a strict lifestyle and quit bad habits. Besides, private funding for educationthe private fund for education makes the schooling system more effective as parents pay closer attention toguardians are more conscious of taking care of their children's learning. For instance, many private schools are performingdoing better in developing countries than state-funded schoolsthan the state-funded schools and parents' active involvement makesmade the difference. To conclude, to a certain extent, I support the view that a governmentI support that a government should provide free education and medication to its citizens. But I also believe that people should also be responsible for their own betterment when it comes to getting education and medical services.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response presents a clear qualified position and considers both the public benefits of government funding and the case for personal responsibility, with education treated convincingly as a national investment. Its main limitation is the unbroken paragraph and weakly supported claim that expensive healthcare improves behaviour; the priority is to organise the two sides separately and replace that assumption with a more credible funding or shared-cost argument.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear qualified position is maintained and both government provision and individual responsibility are developed, although parts of the opposing case rely on doubtful assumptions.
Replace the claim that expensive healthcare improves lifestyles with a reasoned proposal for co-payments, means testing, or shared responsibility.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response progresses logically from support to reservations and a conclusion, but the lack of paragraphing weakens the visibility of that structure.
Use separate paragraphs for public benefits, personal responsibility, and the final qualified judgement, each with a focused topic sentence.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for public services and responsibility, though several collocations and word choices are awkward or imprecise.
Use natural phrases such as healthcare treatment, government investment, take responsibility for their health, private funding, and parental involvement.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A range of sentence structures is generally clear, with recurring but non-impeding errors in articles, prepositions, agreement, and clause phrasing.
Proofread article use and dependent clauses, particularly after phrases introducing examples, causes, and passive expectations.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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