Home is the basic necessity of everyone. A government should provide home to those who cannot afford it. To what extent you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
While many people have abundant luxuries, others suffer from unimaginable poverty and lack the basic human needs like food and shelter. Home is one of the five most fundamental needs for every human and government of a country should try in every way possible to make sure that there is no homeless in the country.
From the very ancient time till today, people’s need for a safe place to live in is considered to be a very fundamental need. This is how the concept of home has emerged and only homeless people can understand the sufferings of not having a shelter. Poor people who cannot manage a decent meal every day often live under the open sky. This is inhuman and the government of a country has a natural obligation to ensure the living places for people. When a government has the responsibility to ensure economic development, infrastructure development, education, roads and highway, protecting people from criminals why providing such a basic need like home for homeless people is in a debate? A huge amount of money spent on research every year and what good those research could bring to the citizens of a country when there are large numbers of people who are living without any shelter?
Natural calamities like flood, tsunami and earthquake make many people homeless and the national and international supports then should always keep the shelter in priority for such victims. War is still a curse in the world we live in and because of that a great number of people are forced to leave their houses and become homeless. Should not rich nations, the government of the country and capable individuals raise their helping hands to ensure the shelter of homeless people? The answer is always yes. That’s what makes us human. When we live in a luxurious building, many others are sleeping beside the pavement. Should not a government be considered a failure when they would spend millions of dollars for space research while there would be thousands of people homeless in the country?
Homeless people would unsurprisingly get involved in crimes and the society would face more trouble controlling them. So from this perspective, a government should focus on ensuring homes for every family. In fact, the loan, mortgage and subsidiary system we notice in many developed countries like the UK and the USA are aimed to help people to have their own home.
To conclude, a living place is one of the most basic needs of every human being and the government of a country should always take initiatives to make sure that there are no homeless people in the country.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Use formal example phrase Original: needs like food Suggested revision: needs such as food Why it matters: Such as introduces examples more precisely in formal writing.
- 2. Add article Original: Home is one of Suggested revision: A home is one of Why it matters: The singular countable noun home requires an article.
- 3. Add definite article Original: and government of a country should try Suggested revision: and the government of a country should try Why it matters: Government requires the definite article when referring to a country's governing body.
- 4. Add plural noun Original: there is no homeless Suggested revision: there are no homeless people Why it matters: Homeless is an adjective here and needs people as its noun, with plural verb agreement.
- 5. Use natural time phrase Original: From the very ancient time till today Suggested revision: From ancient times to the present day Why it matters: This is the idiomatic expression for a period extending from antiquity to now.
- 6. Use uncountable noun Original: sufferings Suggested revision: suffering Why it matters: Suffering is normally uncountable when referring generally to hardship.
- 7. Use idiomatic phrase Original: live under the open sky Suggested revision: live in the open Why it matters: Live in the open is the natural English expression for having no shelter.
- 8. Clarify shelter claim Original: ensure the living places for people Suggested revision: ensure that people have somewhere to live Why it matters: The revised wording expresses the intended obligation clearly and naturally.
- 9. Add passive auxiliary Original: A huge amount of money spent Suggested revision: A huge amount of money is spent Why it matters: The passive verb requires the auxiliary is.
- 10. Fix research agreement Original: what good those research could bring Suggested revision: what good that research can bring Why it matters: Research is uncountable, so it takes that and a singular verb form.
- 11. Use standard quantity phrase Original: large numbers of people Suggested revision: a large number of people Why it matters: A large number of is the standard quantifier for this general group.
- 12. Use plural examples Original: Natural calamities like flood, tsunami and earthquake Suggested revision: Natural disasters such as floods, tsunamis and earthquakes Why it matters: The examples should be plural, and natural disasters is the more standard term.
Suggested Rewrites
- needs like food needs such as food
- Home is one of A home is one of
- and government of a country should try and the government of a country should try
- there is no homeless there are no homeless people
- From the very ancient time till today From ancient times to the present day
- sufferings suffering
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response’s strongest feature is its clear, sustained agreement supported by a substantial range of humanitarian, social, and practical reasons. Its main limitation is that the argument becomes repetitive and relies heavily on rhetorical questions, while recurring grammatical and collocational errors reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to replace repeated appeals with carefully explained evidence about how a government housing policy could operate and whom it should prioritise.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response maintains a clear position and develops several relevant reasons, although some points repeat the moral claim rather than extending the analysis.
Develop the policy dimension with a concrete explanation of eligibility, funding, or housing support instead of repeating that shelter is essential.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress logically through well-defined paragraphs, but repeated rhetorical questions and restatement create some unnecessary circularity.
Give each paragraph one distinct argumentative function and use direct analytical statements to connect reasons with consequences.
Lexical Resource
The response uses a broad and generally effective range of vocabulary, though several inaccurate collocations and word forms reduce precision.
Refine phrases such as provide housing, prioritise shelter, research projects, subsidy schemes, and people experiencing homelessness.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A variety of complex structures is used with generally clear meaning, but recurring article, agreement, plurality, and question-formation errors remain noticeable.
Proofread complex sentences for subject-verb agreement and articles, and form rhetorical questions with consistent auxiliary inversion.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Home is the basic necessity of everyone. A government should provide home to those who cannot afford it. To what extent you agree or disagree?
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