Some people think that the government should ensure the healthy lifestyle of people. However, others argue that it should be decided by individuals and it is their responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Sample Response
Some people argue thatAccording to some, a healthy lifestyle is a personal choice, and this decision should be made by individualsthis should be determined by individuals. Others, however, believe that the government should support healthy lifestyles for all citizensensure a healthy lifestyle for all citizens. This essay discusses both perspectivesThis essay will discuss both these perspectives. Personally, I believe that a healthy lifestyle is a choice that should be made by each individual while the government should guaranteethe government of a country should guarantee adequateproper healthcare services and facilities that promote public health.
On the one hand, if an individual is determined to lead a healthy lifehas the determination to lead a healthy life, theyshe would need little help from the state. A healthy lifestyle is a choice. The government can provide better healthcaremake sure better healthcare, exercise and entertainment facilities throughout the country, but if someonecountry but if someone does not develop the habit of leading a healthy life, the government can do very little about it. ImportantlyInterestingly, this is a choice we can make regardless of our social, educational and economic status. For instance, a rich man might live an unhealthy lifestyle while someone with very lowlittle earnings can decide to live a healthy lifestyle.
On the other hand, there is no denying that a government also has an important role to play in ensuringrole to play to ensure a better lifestyle for its citizens. For instance, in countries where the government fails to ensure proper education, health care facilities, recreation and economic development, people usually follow an unhealthy lifestyleunhealthy lifestyle there. Some important laws and policies on mandatory vaccination, carbon emissions, and drug controllaws and policies like mandatory vaccination, carbon emission, and drug control can determine how healthy people’s lifestyles arethe extent of people’s healthy lifestyles. Thus it is true that government policiespolicy and initiatives help citizens to have a better lifestyle.
Considering both viewpoints, I would like to conclude that the healthy lifestyle of citizens in a country is a combination of individual choice and government initiatives. Thus I feel that each person should choose a healthy lifestyle while the government of a country should ensure proper facilities to make it easier for citizens.
Why this response received Band 7.0
The response presents a clear, balanced position and develops both individual and governmental responsibility through relevant reasoning and examples. Its main weakness is that several claims are broad or imprecise, particularly the link between national conditions and unhealthy lifestyles, while some repeated wording reduces lexical sharpness. The priority is to explain causal links more precisely and support the governmental role with a more specific example.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
Both views and a consistent personal opinion are clearly addressed, although some supporting claims remain general or insufficiently demonstrated.
Develop one specific causal example showing how a government policy changes individual health behaviour in practice.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear four-paragraph progression, though some linking phrases and repeated conclusions feel mechanical.
Use less formulaic transitions and make each paragraph's internal reasoning progress more explicitly from cause to consequence.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is sufficiently varied for the topic, but repetition and several awkward collocations reduce precision.
Replace phrases such as make sure better healthcare and very little earnings with natural, exact collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response uses a good mix of simple and complex structures, with occasional article, agreement, and phrasing errors that do not impede meaning.
Check articles and noun forms in longer sentences, particularly when listing policies, facilities, and collective responsibilities.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Some people think that the government should ensure the healthy lifestyle of people. However, others argue that it should be decided by individuals and it is their responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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