In some countries, many people do not have enough money to access the Internet. Should governments be responsible for ensuring that everyone can get access to the Internet? What is your viewpoint on this issue?
Sample Response
NowadaysIn these days and ages, surfing the Internet is no longer a luxury forto most people. Having realised the unique benefits offered by the Internet, some employers or teachers even use it as a medium for sending instructionsa medium of sending out instructions. Therefore, I believe that governments should be in charge of making sure that all people have the opportunity to useenjoy the chance of using the Internet. NeverthelessUnavoidably, the necessity of having access to the Internetnecessity of being accessible to the Internet is frequently doubted by many people. It is generally argued that one may still live comfortably without the presencepresent of the Internet. Therefore, it should not be governments’ responsibility to guaranteegovernments' responsibility on guaranteeing everybody can use the Internet. Furthermore, it would end up causing more political conflicts if governments were to take on this tasktake the task because it would be unfairas it is totally unfair for most taxpayers. Besides, it is also logistically out of the question to achieve the final goal as it requires a large sum of fundinga large sum of the fund. However, in my opinion, the value of the Internet should not be overlooked by any age groupthe importance of the Internet should not be taken for granted by any age group. As far as education is concernedAs far as education concern, the Internet allows students to seek further knowledgeseek for further knowledge and be aware of more global issues. In addition, getting familiar with the Internet also helps the older generation to bridge the generation gapget rid of the invisible generation gap Deletewhich exists between different generations. To minimise costsTo cut the cost to the lowest, governments can just install the basic equipment for Internet surfing in national libraries and schoolsthose national libraries or schools and make itthem available to the public. To conclude, being possible to get involved in the latest technology is always pleasurable while the contrary can be quite miserable. I therefore strongly think that individuals should be granted the chance to use the Internetexperience the usage of the Internet.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response gives a consistent affirmative view, considers cost and taxpayer objections, explains educational and intergenerational benefits, and proposes public access through libraries or schools. Its main limitation is presentation and language control: the entire argument appears as one paragraph, while frequent awkward phrases and grammatical errors reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to organise objections and supporting reasons into distinct paragraphs and express the proposed government responsibility more concretely.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The position is clear and supported by relevant benefits, counterarguments, and a practical low-cost proposal, though examples remain general.
Specify whether governments should provide free public access, subsidies, or infrastructure and illustrate how one measure would address affordability.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ideas progress recognisably from the position to objections, benefits, a solution, and the conclusion, but the single-paragraph format weakens organisation.
Separate the introduction, counterarguments, supporting case, practical solution, and conclusion into focused paragraphs.
Lexical Resource
The response has adequate topic vocabulary, but frequent unnatural collocations and word-form choices reduce clarity and fluency.
Use natural expressions such as access the Internet, absence of Internet access, public funding, reduce costs, and use online services.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex sentence forms are attempted and meaning remains understandable, but article, preposition, noun-form, and clause-pattern errors recur.
Practise fixed structures such as be responsible for ensuring and as far as education is concerned, while checking articles and countable nouns.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In some countries, many people do not have enough money to access the Internet. Should governments be responsible for ensuring that everyone can get access to the Internet? What is your viewpoint on this issue?
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