Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art which helps to develop quality in people's lives. However, governments should spend money on other things rather than art. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.
Sample Response
Art in the form of literature, theatre and visual arts represents the cultural heritage of societies. Societies with rich traditionscustoms in art and poetry are considered more urbane and advanced. Governments around the globe invest large sums of money in artinvest a huge sum of money on art in an attempt to improve people's livesbring eminence in people's life. I don't agree with this and believe that funding should be directed to other areasfunding should be made on other domains that are more critical in human life such asand employment, health, education and sports.
Government spending on art would be worthwhileGovernment spending money on art would be worthy only if people show interest in it, like art galleries or poetry. In a few countriesIn few countries, sportsports is more appealing than art. For instance, Football, which has more followers than people admiring sculptures or other art.
Secondly, with the current recession all over the world, people are finding it hardpeople are finding hard to raise their families. The government in such a situationin such situation should create more employment opportunitiesopportunities for more employment rather than funding projects to promote art in societyimprove the art in the society. For instance, the administrator of Karachi Metropolitanadministrator of Karachi Metropolitan spends thousands of rupees to revamp old art galleries in order to make them more stylish and modern. The same funding could have been used to improve the lives of art gallery workers living below the poverty line. Thirdly, the government should invest more in the health and education sectorsinvest more on health and educational sector. There are many regions where people have no access to clean water or educational institutes. Building educational and medical institutes would bring greater improvements in their livesmore improvement in their life than constructing a museum to preserve the local heritage of that region.
To conclude, I believe that is an unjust affirmation that art improves one's quality of lifeart brings quality in one's life, and I agree that money shouldI agree money should be invested in more compelling challenges. Investment inon art would only benefit a small minority and with time government will recognise that excellence in human lives can only be enhanced by providing decent opportunities in life, not a sculpture.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is its clear, consistent position that essential services and employment deserve priority, supported by several relevant comparisons and examples. Its main limitation is uneven development: the sports point is fragmentary, while multiple later ideas are compressed into one paragraph, and recurrent awkward phrasing weakens precision. The highest-priority improvement is to develop each reason in a separate, fully explained paragraph and edit collocations and sentence boundaries carefully.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response maintains a clear opinion and offers relevant reasons and examples, although the sports argument is insufficiently developed and some claims are broad.
Explain each alternative spending priority through a clear cause-and-effect argument rather than listing several deserving sectors together.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall argument progresses clearly, but paragraphing is uneven, some linking is mechanical, and one supporting example is an incomplete sentence.
Give each main reason its own paragraph and connect every example explicitly to the claim it is intended to support.
Lexical Resource
The response shows adequate range for discussing public spending, but recurring inaccurate collocations and word choices reduce naturalness and precision.
Revise phrases such as “funding should be made on” and “investment on art” into accurate academic collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mix of simple and complex structures is used, but errors with articles, prepositions, agreement, and sentence completeness occur repeatedly.
Prioritise complete sentence construction and check articles and prepositions systematically during proofreading.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art which helps to develop quality in people's lives. However, governments should spend money on other things rather than art. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.
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