A government’s role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure (roads, water supplies, etc.). All other services (education, health, social security) should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Nowadays, the responsibilities of the government are being widely debated by the publicdebated quite a lot by the people and human rights activists. The state role should only be limited, restricted and confined to few sectors or it should cover every aspect of their citizens and residents’ well-being is a topic of great debate. It has been argued that the government should only be accountable for developing country’s military capabilities and infrastructure enhancement or it should be responsible for other important facilities i.e. education, medical, social protection as well. I strongly believe that all aspects of lifeall the aspects of life associated with citizensstate citizens should be directly provided, maintained, and operateddirectly undertaken, developed, maintained and operated by the state authorities. This argument will be proven by taking into account the availabilitytaking into account availability of resources available to the governmentresources with government and monopolies created by private entitiesmonopoly by private entities and individuals.
Firstly, the funds and financing available by the state is substantially high giving them the cushion to allocated funds and projects for every sector according to its requirements. For instance, the state collects taxescollects the tax from its citizens on the understandingon the reason and commitment that the taxpayer’s money will be used forwill again be spent by utilising on the development and improvement of the infrastructure, healthcare, transportation system etc. However, ifOn the contrary if it refuses to oblige and fails to honour its commitmentfalls back on the commitment of spending money on the publicspending money on public it could result in a reductionresult in reduction in popularity and tax collection. The example shows clearly that the government has the funds at its disposalmoney available in its pool which could be wisely spent for every department and sector. This is evident from the above discussion that budgetary allocation should be done to all public sectors for serving the general publicfacilitating general public.
Secondly, depending on private companies and personnel to establish such important services, such as healthcare and education,divisions i.e. medical, education etc. can create a monopoly and result in deprivation of these facilities for underprivileged people. For instance, a private owner may establish a hospitalthe private owner will develop any of the hospitals for commercial purposes and the poor people won’t be able to afford that treatment. This example illustrates that private individualsthe private people should not be given the sole responsibility to manage these core sectors. Thus, it can be seen that giving individual companies this major role could sabotage the lives of underserved people of the society.
In a nutshell, the resources present with the state and cartel thinking of individuals should be kept in mind by the state authorities for developing or upgrading country. I do believe that the state should be completely responsible for building the basic necessities concerning their citizen life and health. I suppose, going another way round could complicate the problems for sitting government as private individuals could be involved in blackmailing in case their demands are not met.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response maintains a clear position and offers two relevant reasons for government responsibility, using taxation and unequal private access to develop the argument. Its main limitation is the frequent grammatical and collocational inaccuracy that makes several sentences cumbersome or partly unclear; the priority is to simplify sentence structures and use more natural policy vocabulary so the reasoning can be followed without effort.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A clear disagreement is maintained and supported by two relevant, extended arguments, though some claims are overgeneralised or insufficiently justified.
Explain the practical limits of private provision more carefully and replace speculative claims about blackmail with a well-supported consequence.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response follows a clear introduction-reasons-conclusion structure, but mechanical signposting, repetition, and cumbersome sentences weaken flow.
Shorten the repetitive introduction and use referencing that connects claims and examples directly rather than repeatedly announcing them.
Lexical Resource
There is sufficient range for government and public-service issues, but frequent inaccurate collocations and word forms reduce precision.
Use natural expressions such as government funding, allocate resources, public services, and private-sector monopolies.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are attempted throughout, but agreement, article, preposition, and clause-construction errors occur frequently.
Build shorter complete clauses first, then check subject-verb agreement and infinitive forms before combining them.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
A government’s role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure (roads, water supplies, etc.). All other services (education, health, social security) should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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