Rich countries should not employ skilled labour from poor countries, as poor countries need the workers more. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Sample Response

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Migration has become ubiquitous nowadays where every day thousands of people move from one country to another in search of a better quality of life. In this case, the developed nations may recruit all their workers fromsource all their manpower from poorer countriesthe poorer ones which in turn, can result in a scarcity of skilled workers. I completely agree with the notion of rich countries not employing skilled laborers which will be elucidated in the forthcoming paragraphs.

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To begin with, poor nations are losing their most highly skilled citizensconceding their most intelligent natives and consequently, these nations will always dependthe latter will always depend on others for their economic growth. To elaborate furtherTo elaborate it further, this could create dependencythere could be a dependency which can affect the production system or could create a major impediment to the flow of work. For instance, Italy is recently recruiting doctors from countries such as Cuba and Mexicocountries, like Cuba and Mexico, to fill the vacancies caused by a shortage of doctorsvacancies created by the shortage of doctors. Thus, even though these countries tend to spend money on schoolsspend money for the schools to train their young people, they could face a shortage of skilled workersthe supply of skilled laborers could be lacking. Such a decision to allocate more funds to recruiting foreign doctors rather than to its own medical schoolsfor foreign doctors rather than for its own medical schools might lead to a shortagediminution of skilled labour in both countries.

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Moreover, brain drain is emerging not only with the highly educated people but also with the manual workers. For example, rich countries often require farmers because there are no local people in those countrieslocals in the states who are willing to take up the job. In most cases, these workers are poorly paidmeagrely rewarded because they are foreigners, which gives rise toas they are foreigners which gives a rise in discriminatory employment practicesbias-driven employment. Thus, the large corporations are accumulating wealth at the cost of ordinary people.

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To conclude, rich countries should instead invest heavilyshould rather invest greatly in educating their own citizens, instead of importing skilled workers from other regions. Continuing to hire workersContinuation of hiring labours from poor countries will lead to a decline in the number oflead to diminishing of skilled workers and employment opportunities.

Overall assessment

Why this response received Band 6.0

The response presents a consistent position and uses a clear paragraph structure, with enough vocabulary and sentence variety to explain the main concern about worker migration. Development is uneven, however: the Italy example becomes logically confused, and the discussion of farmers and corporate wealth drifts from whether poorer countries need skilled workers more. Prioritise sharper cause-and-effect reasoning and support each paragraph with an example that directly proves the stated argument.

Band score breakdown

IELTS Writing Criteria Scores

TR

Task Response

6.0
Scoring rule

A clear position is maintained, but some supporting ideas are insufficiently focused or logically developed.

Next step

Make each example demonstrate specifically how recruitment by richer countries harms the poorer country that loses workers.

CC

Coherence and Cohesion

6.5
Scoring rule

Paragraphing and overall progression are clear, although some linking is mechanical and several references are ambiguous.

Next step

Use fewer formulaic transitions and clarify pronoun references so the relationships between countries and workers remain unmistakable.

LR

Lexical Resource

6.0
Scoring rule

The vocabulary is varied and includes less common terms, but recurring collocational inaccuracies reduce precision.

Next step

Choose natural combinations for migration, education funding, discrimination, and labour shortages instead of forcing formal-sounding words.

GRA

Grammatical Range and Accuracy

6.0
Scoring rule

The response uses both simple and complex structures, but errors in articles, agreement, modification, and clause control recur.

Next step

Edit complex sentences for clear subjects and referents, then correct article and noun-form errors throughout.

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Rich countries should not employ skilled labour from poor countries, as poor countries need the workers more. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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