In many countries, television shows many foreign-made programmes. The dominance of imported entertainment is harmful to the cultures of these countries. To what extent to you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
Nowadays, foreign-made programs are dominanttake their dominance in most countries, if not all. Undoubtedly, those programs bring about many negative effects. ChiefChiefs among them are the adoption of bad habits and watching-addiction. For several reasons, I agree that imported entertainmentthe imported entertainment negatively affects the cultures of countries.
The first harm caused by imported foreign programs is the adoption of bad habits. In fact, foreign-made programs plant bad habits in their viewerswatchers and these will be negatively reflectedwhich will be negatively reflected in their culture. For example, my neighbour is so obsessed with watching foreign programsforeign- programs and he alwayshe and he always tendsintends to imitate and adopt such bad habits. As a result, he began to drink alcoholAlcohol and use drugs. Consequently, he caused many problems forto his family in particular, and to his neighbours in general. This clearly shows us the harmful effect foreign programs may have onthe danger the foreign programs may have on a community.
A second harmful effect of foreign-made programs is that they cause watching -addiction. In fact, many people, especially young peopleespecially youth, are addicted to those programs. For example, my brother was a student who used to watch foreign- made programs every time and this habit had negative effectsand they left negative impacts on him. As a result, he became careless and indifferent to his studies to the point that he failed three3 exams. Consequently, he was dismissed from universitydismissed from the university and is now jobless. So, it can be inferred that such programs have no benefits but serious harmful effectsno benefits but serious effects.
To conclude, foreign –made programs are harmful to any community since they cause watching –addiction and the adoption of bad habitsbad habits adoption. To avoid above harms, governments are required to band foreign-made programs and replace them with local ones.
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response maintains a clear position and organizes two main harms into distinct paragraphs with illustrative personal examples. However, addiction and individual misconduct are not convincingly connected to the specific question of cultural harm, and several claims are sweeping or repetitive. The highest-priority improvement is to explain concrete mechanisms of cultural displacement, such as changes in language, traditions, or local media, and support them with more credible evidence.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
A consistent position and two relevant harms are presented, but the discussion only partially addresses cultural impact and relies on exaggerated personal anecdotes.
Develop reasons that directly show how imported programmes can weaken local culture, while acknowledging that not all foreign content produces the same effects.
Coherence and Cohesion
The response has a clear introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, with straightforward progression despite mechanical linking and repeated ideas.
Use fewer result connectors and build each paragraph through a precise claim, explanation of cultural impact, and credible example.
Lexical Resource
Vocabulary is adequate for expressing harm, addiction, and community effects, but repetition, inaccurate word formation, and unnatural collocations limit flexibility.
Use precise terms such as dominate television schedules, viewers, cultural influence, screen addiction, adopt harmful habits, and ban programmes.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
A mixture of simple and complex sentences communicates the main message, but frequent errors in agreement, pronouns, articles, punctuation, and sentence construction reduce control.
Edit for correct relative clauses and pronoun reference, remove duplicated words, and check article use and compound-word punctuation.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
In many countries, television shows many foreign-made programmes. The dominance of imported entertainment is harmful to the cultures of these countries. To what extent to you agree or disagree?
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