A huge number of students choose to study English independently on a self-study basis rather than attend a formal course. However, without the assistance of a teacher, students often find it difficult to manage their studies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Sample Response
At recent years, the vast growth of technology relating to the internet, social media, etc. leads us to learn English easily because the contents are always useful for self-learning at home. However, teacher and class study are found to be beneficial in some ways to maximise the result of learning English. Throughout this essay, an intermediate position can be taken through some considerations given underneath.
I believe, self-motivated learning can be more productive by setting goals, the manners in the study process, and the time management. By self-prompting, students or learners can put themselves to the high level of learning by printing modules, looking for needed recordings, collecting movies and watching them, downloading and listening to certain songs, or even doing some chats online with mates living in Western countries. As a result, students can do several things that are urgent to improve several skills which are lack independently and ignore few unnecessary things not to be done.
However, as human being commonly, most of the people seem to be inconsistent to deal with individual learning. They need accompanies from teachers and classmates not only to enrich knowledge in class progress but also to gain established goals together. By working for tasks, assignments, and presentations students will not have much free time to conduct wasteful activities motivation to attempt self-study hardly.
It is a truth that most people feel convenient to learn in silent, but comfort, in some ways, causes laziness and as a result, people cannot accomplish the English learning. That is why teachers are always needed to be involved.
To sum up, I believe that both ways of learning have benefits and drawbacks, therefore, combining them together, without superiority one over another, will be extraordinary relevant to learn English effectively.
IELTS Writing Correction
- 1. Correct time preposition Original: At Suggested revision: In Why it matters: In is the correct preposition with the time phrase recent years.
- 2. Use natural collocation Original: vast Suggested revision: rapid Why it matters: Rapid growth is the natural collocation for technological development.
- 3. Use participle form Original: relating Suggested revision: related Why it matters: Related to correctly describes the connection between technology and the listed media.
- 4. Express enabling clearly Original: leads Suggested revision: enables Why it matters: Enables accurately expresses that technology makes learning easier.
- 5. Use uncountable content Original: the contents are Suggested revision: the content is Why it matters: Content is uncountable here and therefore takes a singular verb.
- 6. Clarify study mode Original: teacher and class study Suggested revision: studying with a teacher in class Why it matters: The revision clearly identifies the teacher-led classroom mode of study.
- 7. Use natural outcome phrase Original: maximise the result Suggested revision: improve the outcomes Why it matters: Improve the outcomes is more natural and precise for describing learning results.
- 8. Use academic signposting Original: given underneath Suggested revision: discussed below Why it matters: Discussed below is clearer and more appropriate academic signposting.
- 9. Fix reporting clause Original: I believe, Suggested revision: I believe that Why it matters: That should introduce the following clause, and no comma is needed.
- 10. Clarify study methods Original: the manners in the study process Suggested revision: effective study methods Why it matters: The original phrase is unnatural and does not clearly name the intended learning practices.
- 11. Remove unnecessary article Original: the time management Suggested revision: time management Why it matters: Time management is used without the definite article when discussed generally.
- 12. Use correct study term Original: By self-prompting Suggested revision: Through self-directed study Why it matters: Self-directed study accurately describes learning independently.
Suggested Rewrites
- At In
- vast rapid
- relating related
- leads enables
- the contents are the content is
- teacher and class study studying with a teacher in class
Why this response received Band 5.5
The response offers a recognisable, nuanced position and considers both independent study and teacher-supported learning, with several relevant examples. However, development is uneven and frequent awkward or incomplete constructions make some claims difficult to follow, weakening the logical force of the argument. The highest priority is to express each main idea in clear, complete sentences and explain precisely how it supports the conclusion that the two approaches should be combined.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response addresses both learning modes and reaches a relevant combined position, but several ideas are asserted or listed rather than clearly developed.
Explain how each advantage or difficulty directly supports the stated degree of agreement instead of relying on lists of activities.
Coherence and Cohesion
Paragraphing and basic contrast create a visible progression, but unclear sentence links and mechanical transitions sometimes disrupt the argument.
Give each paragraph one controlling idea and arrange its explanation and result in a direct, easy-to-follow sequence.
Lexical Resource
There is some range in vocabulary about learning and motivation, but frequent inaccurate word choices and collocations sometimes obscure meaning.
Use familiar, precise expressions for study habits, teacher support, and learner motivation rather than ambitious but unnatural combinations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
The response attempts varied sentence forms, but frequent errors in clauses, articles, agreement, and word forms regularly reduce clarity.
Build shorter complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs before combining them into more complex structures.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
A huge number of students choose to study English independently on a self-study basis rather than attend a formal course. However, without the assistance of a teacher, students often find it difficult to manage their studies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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