Many people think that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while other argue that the aid money is misspent by the governments that receive it, so the international aid should not be given to the poor countries in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Sample Response
With economic globalisationWith the process of economic globalisation, many countries and regions have strengthened cooperation and coordinationliaison in the fields of industry, agriculture, trade and finance. To contribute to mutual developmentIn order to dedicate to the mutual development, many developed countries spare no effort to help poorer countries throughthe poor countries by means of technological, medical and financial aid, which, to my mind, is quite essential to the development of the world. Firstly, aidaids from developed countries optimise people's living standardsstandard and reduceeradicate poverty in the poor countries. Due to the backwardness of science and technology, people in some developingundeveloped countries and regions such as Africa, Latin America and Asia suffer a great deal from poverty, hunger and water scarcitythe scarce of water. International aidaids from developed countries have improved their living environment and supported the development ofhelped them with the development of agriculture, industry and economy. Secondly, international aid provides medical careinternational aids give good medical care and help promote sanitary conditionshygienic condition in the poor countries. Malaria, cholera and smallpox were once severe threats to people's health. With the help of the World Health Organization and some developed countries, these diseases were quickly eliminatedhave been eliminated soon and the residents in the infected areas survived these deadly diseases, which would have devoured millions of lives without international aid. Finally, aid to developing countriesaids to the undeveloped countries, in turn, benefit the donorsdonators. Because of the limited availability ofDue to the limitation of natural and human resources, production costs risethe production cost rises sharply in the developed countries. To reduce costsWith a view to reducing cost, many countries have transferred their assembly linestransferred their assembly lines and production bases to the developing countries, which not only solves the problem of unemploymentlow rate of employment in the developing countries but also makesmake full use of the local resources. Nevertheless, some countries are showing great concern about the mal-expense of their aid aroused by bureaucracy and corruption of some governments. Therefore, the governments should take effective measures to utilise international aids reasonably and prevent abuse. Only with the help of international aids, can our world develop more quickly and steadily.
Why this response received Band 6.5
The response’s strongest feature is its clear support for international aid, developed through relevant discussion of poverty, health, and reciprocal economic benefits. Its main limitation is the unbroken paragraph structure, compounded by recurrent awkward or inaccurate word choices that reduce precision. The highest-priority improvement is to organise the argument into focused paragraphs and systematically revise collocations and noun forms related to aid and development.
IELTS Writing Criteria Scores
Task Response
The response presents a clear position, develops several relevant benefits of aid, and addresses misuse by proposing stronger government oversight.
Engage more directly with the argument for withholding aid by explaining why monitoring is a better response than ending assistance.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument follows a recognisable sequence through social, medical, and economic benefits, but it is presented as one continuous paragraph.
Divide the response into an introduction, separate body paragraphs for distinct reasons, and a conclusion to make the progression immediately visible.
Lexical Resource
The response attempts a broad range of formal and topic-specific vocabulary, but recurrent miscollocations and word-form errors reduce precision.
Use accurate forms and collocations such as aid, water scarcity, donors, misuse of funds, and improve living standards.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
Complex structures are frequent and meaning remains clear, although agreement, tense, article, and noun-form errors recur.
Check agreement and parallelism in long sentences, especially constructions such as not only solves but also make and plural noun phrases.
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IELTS Writing Task 2
Many people think that countries have a moral obligation to help each other, while other argue that the aid money is misspent by the governments that receive it, so the international aid should not be given to the poor countries in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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